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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by Mysty, Feb 15, 2008.



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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Armageddon

    A tempest fugue
    in the mind
    chaos rendering
    the will of time
    blown away

    humility is enforced
    brought to its knees;
    souls at once
    enslaved; caged
    but not by choice

    because
    temptations are enriched,
    sin sweetly beguiles
    and damnation is fulfilled

    as always

    evil perpetuates


    ©2008 Mysty Johnson


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 15, 2008
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    Dear Mysty,

    This is something here...I read it at least three times. It reads like a warning...like a past, present, and future must read. The title captured me and the content I could not even blink till the end. Not too much and just enough with massive imagery, punch and impact. This is lasting...awesome write Mysty.

    Kimberly
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank You Kim..... I'll admit is has something..... I am not truly sure of where it came from .... the first stanze was at night just before dropping off to sleep..... the 2nd after getting a discussion with my group lead at work..... seems I was misunderstood on a few things.... I had to clarify. So after listening to his accusations.... I gave my explanations but still felt upset that I was misunderstood and not taken right.

    the last..... was on valentines day... we had a sweet potluck at work..... and me the diabetic... ;) ... but somehow they all came together and fit just right.... I really appreciate your comments Kim. They help me to see my work in a new light. And that is what I need to really appreciate my own work.

    :hug::hug:


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 15, 2008
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    It scares me some. LOL, but I like it.


    Posted By JolieH | Feb 16, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    You know Jolie.... it scares me too lol ... I do not understand where something like this came from in me

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 17, 2008
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Resonant message indeed - and what an interesting take on the Armegeddon MYSTY. I like your writing because it's never what I think it might be and surprised am I to read the contents... There is actually a lot to interpret within this short poem. You present some ideas that are unique to Armegeddon because as I've always understood it - Armegeddon is the battle which will lead to an eventual fruition of revelations which brings about the cliched "peace on earth" --- Interesting take, your very last line: evil perpetuates

    I say I have to agree with JOLIE = S-C-A-R-Y LOL --- But as always - a nice read that demands the reader to be both introspective and conscious of the world. (Hope that made sense....)

    At anyrate - I thanx you for sharing your writing MYSTY!

    Jacquii.

    ps - What on earth inspired this write?


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 12, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank You Barry......


    Thank you also Ms Jacquii....... I am not sure what inspired this.... a bad day at work possibly.... actually the 1st stanza came to me just before bedtime and I didn't write it down but the next day it kept bugging me. So at work I wrote it down....... then got pissed on by the boss so the 2nd stanza took off. The last..... it just came to me whilst I was unaware.
    I keep a notepad open on my computer at work and just jot down lines as they come to me and sometimes it is just there... I honestly do not know how some lines come to me. I have a line now that keeps repeating and I know it begs to be written. Will post it when I have.

    Thanks again

    Love Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Mar 12, 2008
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Ah! 3 cheers for spontaneity - that's kewl that you jot down lines as they come.
    Looking forward to the next write you've talked about - sounds like it may very well be intriguing!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 14, 2008
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    A very interesting take on Armageddon, which is a very important part of the book of Revelation.

    Your piece does put a very frightening aspect to what will be a period of time that should come to fruition in this generation.

    The poem was well written, though frightening, I would have loved to read more of your interpertation of Armageddon.

    Thanks for sharing your thoughts...


    Posted By mrsmajor | Apr 20, 2008
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    Wow, Mysty! The images in this are tangible! I love the first stanza! It pretty much describes the state of my mind most of the time! All joking aside, I could actually see everything in my mind!

    Armageddon has been done to death, I think, but you've put a new take on it which is refreshing!

    Great job!
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    Very scary to me. But that's why I liked it ;) Once you've finished reading it, the words still haunt your memory. Fantastic :)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Apr 24, 2008
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