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    Mellifluous… this joy in rise
    Meticulous; this joy implies
    Tears of a sad clown, laughing…
    Fears of a lad found, grasping…
    Ridiculous… this joy disguised

    A limerick by
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    Posted By LE00EL | Oct 31, 2012
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Ha. Nice to see your limerick. I looked at it first and says to myself that, "this doesn't seem to follow the limerick form" -- But it does! And nicely so. I see you wordsmithing the hell outta your limerick ==> Nice write my friend. And the title "Ascensions of Hidden Kiddie Melancholy" seems eerily perfect. I wonder why the melancholia though :cry:

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    I dunno my sisstar@your question... I just dictate what my soul is trying to say...


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Yeah - same here. But on re-read of your piece, you know what? It may not be so melancholy a sentiment to begin with. The last line "Ridiculous… this joy disguised" says to me that joy shouldn't be disguised. So perhaps your poem has an optimistic bent? IDK - but I like it LOL _ I suppose I'm overthinking this one slightly. But ya gotta love poems that gets the gears grinding.


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    Good stuff and brilliant lines and yea I kinda feel the same way bout these two lines too, I think it spells optimism to me too but then again it could also be bitter sweet. amazing!


    Posted By JONATHAN | Nov 7, 2012
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