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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    His strong, beautiful
    brown Moroccan body
    has built bricks of protection
    around my temple.

    I lay down the past
    upon my left bosom
    petals blossom
    nourished
    with ancient rivers.

    Eyes sing
    of a flickering passion
    henceforth, I foretell
    of a dream.

    And now
    I have seen
    the hand
    that will walk with me.

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    Wow! So seductive and sensual! Totally AWESOME!


    Posted By lanaia74 | Dec 16, 2006
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    Dear Lanaia,

    Thank you so much for taking precious time to read and comment. This is also one of my favorite pieces. I am humbled by your reply, and thank you again. Take Care.

    ~*Painted*~ :artist:
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    Taking submissions for titles!! LOL!!!!

    ~*Painted*~ ;) LOL!!!!

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    Very well presented, PD! I really love this work...story of rebirth and hope in the hands of a lover...I like!


    Posted By Benny | Dec 25, 2006
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    Thank you Benny for taking time to read and comment. I value you and your opinion highly!! Plus, you are so crazy!!! LOL!! Luv Ya'.!!

    ~*Painted*~ ;)
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    Any ideas for titles would be appreciated, lol.

    {{{{~~~~***PAINTED***~~~~}}}}
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    Dream Lover? LOL

    pedals blossom (should this be petals?) not sure I understand it as it is.

    Lovely feelings ensue from the reading.

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm! Very inspiring write KIM - Style: key! Content: AWESOME! But of course I'm always in awe of your one-of-a-kind style! Girl this poem is sweet!

    :wow: ----- Very nice AND come to think of it - You may have a career with Harlequin :p :joke: - but truly lovely LOVELY poem KIM!

    Thanx for sharing it with us,

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 2, 2007
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    Dear Ms Nomad :giftrose:

    Thank you for taking time to read and comment. A special thank you for catching my spelling Error! Am so glad you enjoyed the read. Dream Lover...hmmmmmm....I love it!

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}}:ss-smile:
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    Dear Ms Jacquii :giftrose:,

    Ahh Ms Jacquii, to hear those words (one-of-a-kind) was music to my ears. Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment. Tis is one of my favorites. I wonder if Harlequin pays more than teaching? Hmmmmmm....lol... Thanks Ms Jacquii....:)

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}}:smiliecurtsy:
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    PD ...... truly beautiful.... this reflects such certainty and a knowing. Is it only us women that can do this? I am thinking of a title for you and what about "A Knowing Awakened" or "Awakening"

    or "Senses Primed"? Just a few ideas.

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Mar 31, 2007
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    Dear Mysty,

    Thank you so such for taking precious time to read and comment. Yes, so true, that we woman have that extra sense, hunh? lolol I love that title "Awakening", as it spoke to me, and if I may, I will use that as my title. By the way, I love your website, and the artwork!!!!I signed the guess book also! Fantabulous!!! Thanks again Mysty!!!

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}};)
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - I hear some make small fortunes... What - with cranking out 40 to 50 dreadful novels a year LOL :laugh: tehehehehe....

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 3, 2007
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    well i'm not morrocan but will crazy white boy do?

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Apr 10, 2007
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    Dear Zaac,

    Thanks for taking time to read and comment. You are soooo bad, and crazay!

    {{{~~**Dr. Rob**~~}}};)
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    Dear Mysty,

    :toot: Awakening it is! Thank you so much for your valued support. Love Ya!

    Kim :yay:

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    Kim:

    I like this poem a lot, though I find the last stanza weaker than all the other stanzas.

    Many thanks.
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    Dear Nikos,

    Thank you for taking precious time to read and to comment. I have often wondered about that last stanza also. I would love some help Nikos (if I may) on making it much stronger.
    Thank you so much.

    {{{{{~~~***KIM***~~~}}}}}:)

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