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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Back to the Wall

    Feeling torn apart
    like only half a soul
    it was good to know
    our hearts combined
    to make each other whole.

    Circumstances changed
    and we ended, moved on,
    ran from the truth
    never voiced
    what went wrong.

    New days and nights
    spent all alone
    crying tears of solitude,
    sobs wrenched
    out of skin and bone.

    Time slowly moves on
    until you find,
    weeks have passed
    faster than a blink,
    you're no longer blind.

    Finally you are
    living in solitude
    back to the wall,
    slowly realizing

    half a soul
    is better
    than none at all.


    ©2008 Mysty Johnson


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 22, 2008
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I really took to the back to the wall expression
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks Hon : )


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 22, 2008
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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    i feel like i just lost half my heart reading that poem.
    i want to cry now.....but its all good. ;)
    want to read it again but afraid i might start crying for sure then.
    loved it.
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I had to give crazymamma a tissue! She was close to tears when she messaged me, lol.

    I had to read it too and found it all Racheul claimed it to be. I can remember when my last husband and I split. It was under very bad circumstances and took me a long time to recover from it. I can remember the nights I spent silently crying because I didn't want my young daughter hearing it and worrying.

    This poem brought back all the emotions of that time but also invoked memories of when I finally realized I could make it without him. Thank you, Mysty, for posting this excellent poem.

    It was the last lines which really brought home this message!
    half a soul
    is better
    than none at all. (Tis true, tis true!)

    hugs,
    Gail
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Dear Racheul and Gail..... I am so sorry I caused either of you any tears. I am also sorry about your marriage's demise Gail. How any man could leave the wonderful woman you are.... *shakes head* ... I just do not know. It seems to me .... some anyways that men are not all they used to be in years past. Men seem to be weaker and less able to deal than they used to be. It is us women that have proved time and time again.... we are stronger emotionally and in some ways physically. *sighs* but this is a pitiful excuse to treat us as though we deserve nothing.

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 30, 2008
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    It's ok, Mysty! I out lived that person and have remarried to a really wonderful guy. Remember, though, I did say he's male so you know he's not perfect, lol.

    hugs,
    Gail

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    This is lovely Mysty,
    I feel like this with my boyfriend being gone for so long. Time passes first slow then it becomes obsolete, half a soul is the perfect way to say it.


    Posted By JolieH | Jan 30, 2008
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    hmmm...

    this has lyrics written all over it...slow kind of melissa etheridge power ballad...yep, i could write one like that. whatcha think?

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Feb 1, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Only if I can sing it Zaac....... and yes I can sing.. a varied voice range. I am told I have a very sexy voice. Used to want to BE a singer....... a music star. My father told me "Honey you have a very good voice .... but in todays day and age you do not survive without a gimmick. Honey you don't have a gimmick so you will never make it." This was back in the late 70's .... so I forgot about that dream and moved onto something else. Yes I still sing......here at home with my HUUUUUUUGGGGGGGGEEEEEE collection of CD's. lol ..... Thanks for the lovely thought though Zaac.

    And Jolie.... yes Half a soul....... an orange cut in half..... not whole ....... I know that feeling ooooooh so very well.

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 3, 2008
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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    Mysty,
    Its ok, dealing with five kids sometimes anything can make you come to tears very easily, but the past has alot to deal with it. I have a great husband now , but for the longest time I didn't understand how to be whole with a half a soul. still say that i love it.
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank You Racheul...... I find that finding inner peace and happiness makes me whole now. There is a difference now I don't feel empty while missing the man I love.... I feel whole but I do miss him dearly.

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 4, 2008
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    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    WEll Done Mysty! It seems that only you could have wrote this feeling and mood so that others could understand it ! Nicely done!!:clapping::clapping:!!

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    One thing I've learned over the years is don't ever let someone tell you you can't. My family members are all uneducated. They were so negative on education. It's like we were some other breed of human, and we didn't have a chance to be anything but working class. (They call it middle class, but they don’t know.) I believed it. College, even writing a poem didn't seem possible. Now I'm 47 and trying to live long enough to do something anything and I will try forever. But, I’ve learned, the opportunity is out there. It takes talent, dedication, and preservation. It's a hell of a lot easier if you start when you're young. My children will have all the encouragement I can give them.


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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank You Curtis :) and WAY TO GO Jolie!!!!!! I am rooting for you hon:) and thanks both of you :D

    Love Mysty


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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    Im awestruck ... this is such a love song , I can imagine Kelly Clarkson singing something like this ..
    it so amazing how the end off this poem feels like just the beggining to a long road to healing and wholeness .... yu invoke tears and then comfort with the hope of self repair...
    love this ...
    Chester


    Posted By JONATHAN | Feb 7, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank You Chester ....is so good to see you in JPiC again hon.... missed ya

    Love

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 8, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    double


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 8, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    triple


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 8, 2008
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