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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Hey! Ever hear of a Paradelle Poem?

    A Paradelle is a difficult french poetic form first used in the eleventh century. This fixed form of poetry consists of four six-line stanzas with a repetitive pattern.

    First Three Stanzas:

    The first two lines, as well as the third and fourth lines of the first three stanzas MUST be the same (repeat). Where it begins to get difficult and become more of a poetic puzzle, is when reaching fifth and sixth lines. These lines MUST contain ALL the words from the preceding four lines within the stanza using them only once to form completely new lines.

    Last Stanza:

    For the most difficult piece of this poetic puzzle, the final stanza of the paradelle does not repeat like the preceding stanzas, rather the final six lines MUST contain EVERY word from the first three stanzas, and ONLY those words, again using them only ONCE to form completetly new lines.



    I would like to see if anyone else will take this challenge.
    I'll begin with the one I wrote called.

    "Beneath The Dripping Cypress Trees"

    'Tis the breeze beneath the cypress trees,
    'Tis the breeze beneath the cypress trees.
    Where shady branches bend and bow,
    Where shady branches bend and bow.
    Beneath the bend and branches breeze,
    Where the cypress' bow 'tis shady trees.

    Ink like stains of sap fold down,
    Ink like stains of sap fold down.
    Brown and dripping tears that keep,
    Brown and dripping tears that keep.
    Sap-like ink and stains of brown,
    Tears that fold keep dripping down.

    Will such variegated colors blend,
    Will such variegated colors blend.
    Away within envelope of leaves,
    Away within envelope of leaves.
    Of such colors envelope within,
    Variegated leaves away will blend.

    Within the sap 'tis shady brown,
    And keep the breeze of that fold down.
    Variegated stains away will blend,
    Where colors bow and branches bend.
    Tears of ink envelope like leaves,
    Beneath such dripping cypress trees.


    Blessings
    Sally

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    I cannot do this right now, but I shall try! I love the flow of this form of poetry...and you did a great job!


    Posted By Benny | Jan 14, 2007
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    Sally; This is a fantastic form and I would love to try it! I need some other info first though.
    1) Does it HAVE to rhyme? And if so,
    2) Does it have a particular rhyme scheme?
    3) Must it have a definite number of syllables per line?
    4) Must it pertain to any particular subject?

    Please let us know! TY!
    BTW - Have you let MsJ know about it so that she can add it to the Poetry-defined section?


    Posted By Altree94 | Jan 14, 2007
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey SALLY - Great piece - fascinating poetic form... Your poem expresses a type of melancholy though. The picture I get is of the weeping willow. Majestically somber, perhaps depressed or so, recalling memories of long ago time. Good memories and wondering if ever such happiness can take place again....

    Anyway - enjoy the read - I'll do a little bit of research before adding it to the Poetry-Defined section.

    Thanx for the sharing.

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 15, 2007
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Greetings fellow writers:

    Benny: Thank you for your reply. Indeed this type of poem is a difficult one. It took me quite a while to piece it all together. I hope you can take the challenge.

    Altree: Nope this type of poem does not have to rhyme. but being a rhymster I had to do it that way. :) It also doesn't have any restrictions on the syllable count so you're safe there too. And lastly, The subject of the poem is entirely your own choice. I hope you can take the challenge.

    MsJacquii: Yes indeed it does sound like a weeping willow. When I wrote it, it was a challenge from another email poetry group, who had a subject on Cypress Trees and I indeed wanted to share it with all of you. Thanks so much for your comments.

    Blessings
    Sally

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    This is indeed a puzzle that I cannot seem to talk my mind into sitting down quietly and attempting...but I shall because I can't stand to think I cannot do something! Ok, there...lol


    Posted By Benny | Jan 23, 2007
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    Glad I found this thread...a new year challenge for sure...thanks Sally! I shall try to squeeze an hour away from the chillens today and give it a go! :)
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    Dear Sally.....this was simply exquisite, and you have done a beautiful job on this. Challenge for sure...and will try. Thank you for sharing this, as we learn yet another beautiful piece to this craft. :bravo:

    {{~~**Painted**~~}}

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    Ok, Sally! Here is my attempt at this form! It was a real challenge for sure!

    Natural Rambling

    Where gently tender is the frond?
    Where gently tender is the frond?
    My feet lead to a flowing pond.
    My feet lead to a flowing pond.
    Lead my feet to a tender frond,
    Where gently flowing is the pond.

    Trails among scented rushes sweet
    Trails among scented rushes sweet
    Paths growing, will these meet?
    Paths growing, will these meet?
    Rushes scented, growing sweet.
    Among these paths, will trails meet?

    Bullfrogs and lazy winds pass
    Bullfrogs and lazy winds pass
    Blowing water on eager grass
    Blowing water on eager grass
    Eager winds and water pass
    Lazy bullfrogs on blowing grass

    Grass on trails, scented and sweet,
    Tender winds pass, gently blowing.
    These paths lead my eager feet
    to a lazy water flowing.
    The pond is where bullfrogs will meet,
    Among frond rushes growing.

    TY for giving us this form, Sally!


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Oooo! Nice work MS TREE! I kinda like this form - It could also be described as a type of blues with the repetitive lines - but it's more intricate...

    It does seem as if a song of some sort - especially in your write TREE - Now that JPiC is upgraded - I shall endeavor to finish the Poetry Defined site and add this form to the Types of Poetry section :)

    Great writes LADIES - And thanx again SALLY for introducing us to the form Paradelle ;)

    Jacquii.
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    Awesome Ms Tree! Well, I do have ALL Summer to try this fantabulous form, lolol. Thanks again Sally for bringing this to our attention......now where is that Summer job? lololol

    Kim ;)

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