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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I've been a fold in your curves
    like a nest they suit me well,

    I'd written poetry between the sighs
    and found you amuse me rather well,

    I'd neared our fruition and found it lost weight,
    my gravitational field is a prison, my world all too heavy,

    there were pieces of the dreams I recall fondly,
    like the sheening of the sun on your hair
    how the colors rainbowed out like a ravens feathers

    there were bits I could recall, memories that lovers share
    all that were drowned by silence,
    between the sighs you were no longer there.

    by Erik Estabrook

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    well damn E! This is such a sad piece. All your emotional romantic type poems have a sad bent :( I like this write though - makes me think if you're going through such a sad sad love affair - then you get the brunt of the sadness and maybe alleviate the sadness I feel in my love life. I'm so opportunistically selfish LOL -- Anyway - nice piece. Wish you could be bothered to stick around JPiC and share in the poetic love...

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | May 16, 2011
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    when I read that I'm rather ashamed but I guess I'm back and I never did go too far away.

    E! this was lovely, I think this is the stuff I would want to read right now, stars shining above me, on my terrace, listening to REM and simultaneously feeding on poetry, Il read this again between the sighs.


    Posted By JONATHAN | Sep 29, 2011
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    Hi Eric,
    Awesome poem.
    You found just the right words to describe what's "between the sighs". This poem left me thinking... that's a good thing.

    These lines are beautiful.

    SuzyQ


    Posted By SuzyQ | Sep 30, 2011
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks msJ, Jt, and suzy Q

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