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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    He walked up the flight of stairs,
    his posture rigid, erect
    like an undaunted warrior
    reluctant to show on his person
    the ravages of a long raging battle within .

    He let himself into his empty apartment
    pausing a moment to acknowledge its silent embrace .
    He switched on the lights
    more out of habit than necessity
    simultaneously stripping himself down to nothing .

    His shoes, his clothes one atop the other
    like a messy hillock on the dark granite floor.
    He strides nude across the room
    even as winter's frozen fingers
    greedily caresses his naked skin.

    His jaws set tight, his muscles tense,
    refusing to bend, determined not to shiver,
    challenging nature to outdo the chill he felt within .
    He sits on his bed staring long and hard
    at the picture of a woman on the wall.

    Finally he is conquered, broken by longing,
    his anguished sobs breaking the silent embrace
    and he finds himself asking aloud
    "will you be home for Christmas"
    "will you be home for Christmas"
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    Posted By JONATHAN | Dec 3, 2010
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    ooh how heartbreaking :( Beautifully written but heartbreaking nonetheless. :hug:
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    Yea heartbreaking ... This one's special for me . Thank you sweetheart for stopping by and big yay for jpic back in action .. btw yu on facebook ?


    Posted By JONATHAN | Dec 4, 2010
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    Wow Jonathan....you can feel his spirit crushed like a soft ice cream cone...yes this enthralled my heart, the penning was beautiful in execution from title to the last word, and oh how wonderful it was to read you again...been a long time. Keep up the great work...love ya.
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    Thank yu Kim .. this poem was way too personel .. had second thoughts bout putting it up but did anyway .. glad yu feel it !


    Posted By JONATHAN | Dec 15, 2010
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    This was gutwrenching Jon. A poem that is so drenched with emotion, it's a waterfall. Definitely heartbreaking, the last two lines like a soft sigh.

    Nice write dude - I especially love how the poem is titled. After reading the last two lines - I looked back up to the title, naturally. And it was a perfectly clever moment. Of course big boys don't cry...all the time anyway. :hug:

    Thanks for the share. Hope you had a very merry Christmas!

    Jacquii.
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    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Dec 28, 2010
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    Do you ever find yourself pushing your pain onto a fictional protagonist exploiting poetry as a medium ...I look back and this feels like my most selfish poem ... thanx for stopping by Ms J .. love ya
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    Posted By JONATHAN | Jan 7, 2011
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    I think poetry has to be selfish. It has to be personal and it has to be a testimony on the life of the person behind the words. Otherwise it takes the risk of becoming a banality, often making for tedious & boring read, and without the "stuff" of substantive poetry which can evoke true & meaningful feeling in the reader.

    I don't believe poetry as an entity can be exploited. (Unless one is running scandalous poetry scams for a profit maybe - but that's a different topic entirely...) I've found that though the writer may shape the poem, most often times it is the writer who is being shaped by the poem. (Ever had a poem that simply "wrote itself"...?)

    Do I find solace in placing my own pain onto a fictional protagonist. Sure. It's part of the "poetry-as-cure" concept that saved my life back in 2006 when I felt I had nothing but poetry, JPiC (the ambiance and wonderful family of creative peoples as well as its volumes of intriguing writes) and the hope for something better.

    So ==> Long live selfish poetry that has the power to allow a transcendence of thought! :exactly:

    Anyway = love ya right back Jon [IMG]


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    I needed that assurance .. was afraid of sounding cranky ..Thank yu Ms J ... love ya
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    Posted By JONATHAN | Jan 10, 2011
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    We all deserve to sound cranky every once-in-a-while though right? :p
    Glad to provide assurance dude = Me gots lots of assurance for you.
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    I bet its the kinda assurance I really like .... yum


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    LOL - You already know!
    Boop boop be doop! [IMG]
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    yu need to stop flaunting those legs ... my third leg has got a bad case of the twitch .


    Posted By JONATHAN | Jan 18, 2011
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    but what your 3rd leg needs
    is a sensual passion-kiss;
    some tender loving care
    and a good case of this. [IMG]

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    It is not bad for boys to cry sometimes, as you can see not only girls are very emotional ,specially boys, boys hide their feelings in front of the ladies but deep inside the pain is much stronger . and boys sometimes can't control their feelings.
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    Very true. We live in a society that oftentimes smirks upon the man that's not afraid to show his emotions. It's unfortunate, but 'tis the way of the world. I personal love a man who's not afraid to let his emotions free.

    Welcome to JPiC btw Shantallove. Seems I recall you having posted here before... Feel free to introduce yourself over at the Member Introductions section ;)
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    Jon this is a beautifully written piece and I can definitely see the maturity and growth here. The emotion is tempered but fully exposed to the reader and the scene is one of desperate loneliness and rigid self-control... I can see that the character you created here reflects a part of yourself. Love, love it!! Brilliant writing, dude! :)

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    Hey Therese ... Im sorry it took me awhile to get back to you . Im glad yu like this and your insight is amazing .. writing this helped ... yu know i love yu ... Chester


    Posted By JONATHAN | Feb 11, 2011
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    Hi jonathan

    This is a nice little snapshot...as amzy says...a verb on pause and belies personal and artistic growth

    Zaac


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    thank you Zaac ... thank you so much sir ...


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