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    Wind WindXSaul

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    Blood And Water

    Father.
    Mother.
    Brother.
    Sister.
    Aunt.
    Uncle.
    Cousin.
    Grandfather.
    Grandmother.
    And friends.
    Ashes is ashes,Dirt is dirt,Skin is skin,
    And blood is thicker then water.
    No matter how many times I say this,
    No matter how many lines,obstacles and curses
    I'll come running with words of undoubtedly trust.
    Hurry for I hear the steels coming,Hurry for I see
    The guns rising,Hurry for I smell hate coming
    From the cretins,Hurry theses are the words I shout from
    My mouth.Bound by bondage,I won't forget your words.
    I'm being destroyed,but I won't forget your face.
    Now I'm buried,but I won't forget our live's.
    This by death,one by one being torn apart.
    No not by death but by life.The lives we live tears us apart.
    Our pride forcing us to choose one or the other,
    What's your choice?
    If it was only skin then with a needle and thread,
    I could sew us together so that well never forget our blood
    Just there.Believe me,keep me,hold me.Why is it who runs From me?
    There is no cowardice in forcing the truth.
    There's Ashes,Dirt,Skin,and Blood is what makes a person.
    When the lies in tangle us,the truth is like a spear through The soul.
    Now matter the scars there's someone to bandage Them up.
    This is what it means to be Family.


    Posted By Wind | Oct 16, 2012
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    Blood And Water

    Fathers.
    Mothers.
    Brothers.
    Sisters.
    Aunts.
    Uncles.
    Cousins.
    Grandfathers.
    Grandmothers,
    and friends.
    Ashes is ashes,dirt is dirt,skin is skin,
    and blood is thicker then water.
    No matter how many times I say this,
    no matter how many lines,obstacles and curses,
    I'll come running with words of undoubted trust.
    Hurry for I hear the steels coming, hurry for I see
    the guns rising, hurry for I smell hate coming
    from the war mongering cretins, hurry theses are the words I shout from
    my mouth.Bound by bondage, I won't forget your words.
    I'm being destroyed, but I won't forget your face.
    Now I'm buried, but I won't forget our live's.
    This by death, one by one being torn apart.
    No not by death but by life. The lives we live tear us apart.
    Our pride forcing us to choose one or the other.
    What's your choice?
    If it was only skin then with a needle and thread,
    I could sew us together so that we'll never forget our blood
    Just there. Believe me,keep me,hold me. Why is it You run From me?
    There is no cowardice in realizing the truth.
    There's Ashes, Dirt, Skin, and Blood, these that make a person.
    When the lies entangle us, the truth is like a spear thrusting through the soul.
    No matter what scars there are, there is always someone to bandage them up.
    This is what it means to be Family.

    [IMG]I did a rough edit Wind. With the punctuation's and the capitals and other changes I made in bold to show you where it could be better. This is an awesome poem Wind and if only family could be like that close. You know if we could pick our family it would be our very best friends. But then would we begin to hate them like family can be hated?? I Love All My siblings but I don't necessarily like them and that is why we have best friends : )


    Posted By Mysty | Oct 17, 2012
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    Wind WindXSaul

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    Yeah,i am not someone who will make freinds instead i'm around my brother's or sister's i never been to keen on an outsider knowning me.But if i could have one freind like that i suppose the impossible for me is possible.Picking family from freinds would be fun but in the end no matter how bad my family may get or how ugly things turn out i'm more happy to have them then the food i eat


    Posted By Wind | Oct 17, 2012
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