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    BORROWED TIME

    Through twists and turns
    into the depths of sleeplessness,
    night's restless phantom leads me
    to my darkened window.
    Veiled in moonlight, I stand —
    a silhouette of sagging flesh
    slowly dying in stale bedroom air.
    Time is layered upon my skin —
    carelessly draped years,
    worn and wrinkled
    like an old newspaper
    wrapped around some fragile antique.
    Deep in my bones, wisdom aches.
    Age-weary eyes blink back the past
    as I struggle to accept fate.
    A faceless thief has drained my youth —
    shriveled this woman and half-emptied her mind.
    Often I come to this odd hour of the night
    to collect my scattered thoughts,
    but mostly I come to borrow time from the darkness;
    time I cannot repay.


    Posted By SuzyQ | Jul 5, 2011
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    WOW!:shocked: I quite love this poem.... it feels like you have been sneaking into my head. I cannot find any fault nor a favorite line as I quite love the whole thing. I am going to put this into my favorites so I can re read often. Nice to meet you Suzy Q and thank you for an awesome read!


    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Jul 7, 2011
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    Hi SuzyQ....this poem is something. It reads like an anthem of sorts. I also could not find a favorite line, however, the line I quoted was brilliant. I could "feel", these words within. I felt a bit sad after reading, and I love when a poem evokes emotion in me. It's poetry that is real and alive. Thank you for sharing and I look forward to reading you again.

    Kimberly :)

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    Thank you Mysty and Kimberly. I'm so glad you found something to like in my words.

    Pssst... most days I don't feel the way I did when this poem was written.
    :D


    Posted By SuzyQ | Jul 18, 2011
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    :wow:
    What a write! Makes me wonder if "age" is the great cosmic joke perpetuated on all living beings by a very omnipotent, yet facetiously humorous God... Hmmm - where is that we can get a sip from this fountain of youth? Silly living things... Everything must come to an end LOL

    Okay - ^ that's ^ what your poem made me think of immediately - I suppose it's the sarcastic side of me. The more relaxed, carefree part of me hopes that these "Age-weary eyes" will have someone special to stare deep into them with love, whenever it is that these bag o' bones are ready to be lit afire.

    Thanks for the share :)


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 19, 2011
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    SuzyQ Member

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    Dear Jacquii,
    I hope it's a long time coming before your bag o bones give up the ghost! hehe
    Thanks for sharing your thoughts. It's nice to hear what kind of impression my words bring to other's mind.
    :sign_thanks:


    Posted By SuzyQ | Jul 20, 2011
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    this piece of writing has a clear and distinct tinge of experience to it. it didn't fully impact me, but perhaps that's because i'm young yet.. such is life. but be that as it may, this poem is clearly strong in its own respect and will impact many others who are more able to relate to it than i. though i don't feel its message as strongly as others may, i still look forward to more work you may publicize in the coming time. cheers!

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    Hi Andrew,
    Thanks for reading and sending along your comments.... I think.
    I hate to think about myself being experienced with time and age!!!@ I don't suppose I could convince you that this was all speculation on my part??? Honestly..... I'm NOT the woman in this poem most days. It was just a topic that called to me and I looked into my future???

    I guess compared to your young age, you'd call me old. But just you wait 'til you get here... you'll deny your "time" experience too! :rolleyes:

    Thanks again,
    SuzyQ


    Posted By SuzyQ | Aug 4, 2011
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    GreaterValues New Member

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    i didn't mean to offend at all. i honestly don't view age as a hallmark of experience, it just seems the wisdom is most often associated with experience in life measured through time and age. my father tells me i'm wise beyond my years and i like to believe him. how old are you anyway, ms. SuzyQ? if you don't mind me asking.

    p.s., my comment was meant to be positive!

    SuzyQ Member

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    hahahaha
    'Tis okay Andrew, absolutely no offense was taken. I actually chuckled about it.
    I had almost mentioned in my last post that you sounded wise (as your father says) for your fifteen years, but thought I'd wait and read more about you through your work and posts first. And now (I'm chuckling again), please don't take offense to what I'm about to say, but this is something you should know.... a wise person NEVER asks a woman her age. :eek:k2:

    SuzyQ


    Posted By SuzyQ | Aug 5, 2011
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    hey, cut me some slack; i'm workin' on it! hahahaha, i'll be sure to bare that in mind the next time i'm considering whether to or to not ask a woman's age, it's clear to me now what i should not do! thanks for saving me some future grief, hahaha.

    also, you mentioned that you've read some of my other work, or am i mistaken? if not, then what did you think of what i've written? thanks a lot. :)

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    You're a fast learner.... good.

    I was actually referring to the responses you posted on this thread when I wrote that. But I did go and read a couple of things you wrote and I will return the favor of a response when I find a free moment AND a clear head at the same time. :crazy:

    SuzyQ


    Posted By SuzyQ | Aug 8, 2011
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    SuzyQ

    I think that your poems have great style. I enjoy reading them. And this one brought to mind some of what I have been reading about latley. Which is that we are more than just our physical self of course.
    And although we may all be on borrowed time here, some more or less than other's. I do believe that we are spiritual beings having a human experience. And though our bodies will wear out and become frail and fragile and even breakdown. That we will alway's live on. And I take comfort in this after turning fifty this year. And wondering how the hell I got fifty so fast. I think that I will not borrow any more time. At least not right now.


    Posted By michael | Sep 6, 2011
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    SuzyQ Member

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    Hey Michael,
    Thank you for reading my poetry and for liking it. :)

    I totally agree with this.

    My only fear at this point is not in dying, but aging to the point that somebody else will have to change their life to take care of me. Hopefully this is a long way off for both of us!


    Posted By SuzyQ | Sep 6, 2011
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    Deep in my bones, wisdom aches.
    Age-weary eyes blink back the past

    I'm 27 but I could totally feel those lines .. the pain of knowing makes you wish your wisdom wasn't given to you so freely, don't you ?


    Posted By JONATHAN | Sep 8, 2011
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    SuzyQ Member

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    Hi Jonathan,
    Thank you. It's nice to hear your thoughts. :)
    Wisdom is a hard-earned attribute for sure.

    SuzyQ


    Posted By SuzyQ | Sep 9, 2011
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    SuzyQ I have to say it made me FEEL old just reading it! lol! Very well written... I love it! So many pictures popped into my head reading this... very relatable I suppose... to someone like me soon to start down that road... hehe! I will call upon the surgeon's knife I fear, when I get there... methinks I am too vain? :)

    Nomad :beach:

    Veiled in moonlight, I stand —
    a silhouette of sagging flesh
    slowly dying in stale bedroom air.
    Time is layered upon my skin —
    carelessly draped years,
    worn and wrinkled
    like an old newspaper
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    ((GASP!!!))
    lol - I'd have had to take you outback and beat your hindend had you asked me that bahahahaa -- Of course I don't mind telling me own age. Some people have a hangup about it - I don't. But of course I'll be turning 25 again this month bahahaha....

    At anyrate - 3 cheers to poetry which has the capacity to simultaneously inspire thoughtful conversation AND a good chuckle :chuckle:

    J.

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    Nomad, I'm sure you have miles to go before you step foot on this road! lol But go ahead and resist every step of the way. :yes:

    Yeah... Jacquii, wish everything I write could be as embraced as this!

    Thanks to all of you.
    SuzyQ


    Posted By SuzyQ | Sep 16, 2011
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