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    mountainpepper Member

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    Like a drug of dependence, this will keep me coming back
    out along the Sardine Creek, walking on a wombat track.
    I should know every cranny and hurdle in the way,
    But secrets of the bush keep arising every day.

    I am captured by a log with its copper coloured skink,
    a family of firetail finches flying down to take a drink,
    the scent of wild boronia drifting down a mountainside,
    a wallaby amongst some wiregrass, believing it can hide.

    I am no more important than a leaf upon the ground,
    and no more influential than a feather that I found.
    I do not have the power of the Admiral butterflies,
    and feel I’m way too over sympathetic where death lies.

    I am captured by the orange fungi, hiding from the light,
    a flock of screeching mountain lories overhead in flight.
    Maidenhair cascading, mingling with the waters flow,
    and showers in the pollen where clematis creepers grow.

    I am not to be the master, just one link that’s in the chain,
    like the sand upon the creek bed, I merely am one grain.
    Yes I am one single figure that will come and go with time,
    where strength does mean survival; weakness the lethal crime.

    I am captured by the creek and the bounty it provides,
    the colour and its boldness or a sweet voice that it hides,
    I do not have a vision for to progress or reshape…
    Yes here is where I’m captured and I never will escape.
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    Minellis'Vertigo Member

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    Your poem has such a definite rhyme and rhythm to it, it flows very naturally. I read it over a few times and your poem is like the creek you talk about, I'm sucked in by what I find/read, just enjoying it and not having any power over it. Hope that makes sense!
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    beautiful .. I gather you are an outback person and from Australia, the Australian Tourism industry is targeting Indians hard with commercials on tv and travel shows and this poem brought all of that alive for me through the written .. Great Job Mate !
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    Posted By JONATHAN | Jan 24, 2013
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Beautiful piece you've shared here mountainpepper. The images are stunning really, you've a definite way of editorializing the outback. This poem makes me think of the phrase "one with nature"

    That's what you've captured here: the fact that one is part of nature, not greater or lesser as it were...but one part of the whole. I immensely enjoyed this piece. Thanks for the share.

    J.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 27, 2013
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