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    The long years are harsh where the hot sun does burn
    on the sand hills and plains when seasons won’t turn
    where saltbush and samphire do somehow survive
    and through these hot days there seems little alive.

    But shade in the she-oaks can offer relief
    for creatures surviving who still hold belief
    the outback’s not dying though is tinder dry…
    then cotton-wool clouds start to build in the sky.

    And when it gets humid and balmy at night
    the sunrise is red with the new dawning light
    and leaves get up dancing and float on the breeze
    ants start to scurry and thunder does tease.

    There’s change on the way and a scent in the air
    and storm birds are singing to make all aware
    that drought may be over and soon there’ll be rain
    the outback will flourish ‘til drought comes again.

    Now pastel pink earth starts to darken to red
    as it quenches it’s thirst on the deluge ahead
    the creek beds awake from their slumber for years
    and billabongs form behind quick rising weirs.

    The pans and the lowlands are holding their fill
    and outstation tanks are now starting to spill
    so comes a new dawn from a heartbreaking scene
    when almost like magic the land turns to green.

    Where a land is vindictive and can be unkind
    where water is life, and with man undermined
    where vastness is changing from sleeping repose
    the buds are now bursting and now they disclose…

    …a rainbow that travels so long with the eye
    in a landscape rebirth, to thanks from the sky
    I’m taking a stroll through a live daisy chain
    in a carpet of colour that follows the rain.
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Wow that is a wonderful long poem. These lines below... Beautiful. Thanks for posting.


    I’m taking a stroll through a live daisy chain
    in a carpet of colour that follows the rain.


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 13, 2013
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hi and welcome back to the community mountainpepper. I've moved your poem to Creative Traditional.

    Kewl username btw. Feel free to tell us about it in our Member Introduction section.
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    Nice poem. A perfect depiction of rustic Australia I'd say. This piece says to me, "Only real men can navigate the Outback." Perhaps because the "land is vindictive and can be unkind" --- Yet - if and when the soul is ready, it will receive the most bountiful of gifts in the shape of natural splendor.

    I enjoyed this one.

    Thanks for the share. And please familiarize yourself with the JPiC Posting Policy, particularly the Forum Etiquette section before creating new poetry threads. ;)

    J.


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    G'day there Mysty...
    Thanks for reading and posting your comment. A few years ago a ten year plus drought broke where I lived at the time, and almost overnight what appeared to be desolate, parched, and arid land turned green at first after constant rain and then followed many hues from desert flowers that stretched for as far as I could see. This scene inspired to write this poem. It's amazing how quick nature recovers from adversity and how the flora and fauna have adapted.
    Thanks again Mysty
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    Thank You MsJacquii for reading and giving your comment. Yes, it appears that only a special breed of men and women can tolerate the heat, isolation, hardship and heartbreak that Central Australia provides. Each time I visited the interior the landscape appeared different due to weather conditions at the time.
    Catch you later MsJacquii
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    You're quite welcome Lindsay! The more I read you're work, the more I'm becoming a fan. So it really is a thrill to comment it.

    I've travelled a wee bit, but never to Australia thus far. I'm a fan of rustic nature, and might I say: your precise description of the Outback most certainly has me daydreaming of visiting there!

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    I don't read what the other people give response to it. I only say one thing that it is just amazing.

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