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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    The Bard he had a way with words that came
    From deep within. Dylan Thomas knew that
    The forms of old were best if one wants fame
    And poets hold no fear of getting fat
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    Sonnet and the Villanelle, poems paired
    In grace and beauty let words echo down
    The ageless corridors where truth is shared
    By those who dare to don the thorny crown
    ~
    But those inflected with the plague of dreams
    Will write what comes out so naturally
    Sometimes it is free flowing verse that seems
    To draw it’s force from all that we can see
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    The Bards rest easy knowing that the day
    Is never lost for poets shown the way
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    Mike Carson
    4-15-2008


    Posted By Kit Carson | Apr 16, 2008
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    solo New Member

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    Kit!....that is way better than my first attempt...(which I hope nobody ever finds!!!!!!)

    one point....the couplet at the end....I seem to think that those two lines are of different lengths....to the best of my knowledge they should be the same...five feet...

    your last line has six feet to my ear....I may be wrong that's just how I'm reading it

    otherwise well done on your "first time" ;)


    Posted By solo | Apr 16, 2008
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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Great Kit,
    Soon you will be sword to sword with Shakespeare.


    Posted By JolieH | Apr 16, 2008
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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    I just saw that on another site, you are exactly right....not sure what happened there, but I do know my focus was on another line and worrying about that. Quick fix will do it, thanks!


    Posted By Kit Carson | Apr 16, 2008
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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    I just saw that on another site, you are exactly right....not sure what happened there, but I do know my focus was on another line and worrying about that. Quick fix will do it, thanks!


    Posted By Kit Carson | Apr 16, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    I like the subject you chose to
    write about and
    you did it well. Not bad for a first Kit.
    I enjoyed muches :thankyou:


    Posted By Moonchild | Apr 17, 2008
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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Thank you Jolie! I think he's fairly safe. :)


    Posted By Kit Carson | Apr 17, 2008
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    What a great way to say starving poets!

    Love this! It's so (sorry) poetic and beautiful! It speaks of what we all do...dream and how our dreams, written down for all to see, affects all who read it.

    Love your sonnet, Mike!
    Gail

    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Thank you very much Gail! Congrats on 400! Good to see you on here more often...I believe you are one of the first people I met when I got here last year...always appreciate your comments. I am starting to drift back here myself...just get so busy.


    Posted By Kit Carson | Apr 18, 2008
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I know what you mean about getting busy. Crazymamma5 and I are working on a fantasy novel and I've become busier and more preoccupied with it. My husband and I are also biking and loving it with the warmer weather here so my time for writing gets cut a bit more.

    I'm also sewing a hammock for crazymamma's husband out of old jeans and that also takes time, lol. Life just has a way of taking over what ever plans you might make, lol.

    hugs,
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