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    mysticpoet729 The "Mystic" Poet

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    Cassandra

    I met up with my friend Cassandra
    Asking if we can meet for lunch
    She turn me down
    Saying she was busy
    She has chapters to read; papera to write
    and club meetings to attend
    We will meet up some other time
    I promise you that
    Years later, I saw Cassandra.
    I wanted to celebrate my new job
    And a new man in my life
    she turn me down
    Saying she was busy
    she has projects to go over; reports to review
    and her boss is on her butt
    We'll meet up some other time
    I promise you that
    Years later I saw her face
    And tired eyes
    I want to celebrate the birth if my first child
    She turn me down
    Saying she was busy
    she's traveling all over the world
    and dealing with family issues
    We will meet up some other time
    I promise you that
    Well, she kept her promise
    We finaaly met up with each other
    and told her about my life
    While she sat and listened
    In her grave



    copyright fsully 2007

    deep_poet86 Endless Rewind

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    I love this poem because it can be related to fact, there are people in the world like that. I don't find it common, but I know there is. I loved the ending, it is sad but perfect. This is a really good poem, awesome work, thanks :)


    Posted By deep_poet86 | Feb 5, 2008
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Ironic, isn't it? Someday, we'll do lunch, kinda busy right now, life has a way of taking control, this poem shows just that. Gotta take time to smell the roses (I can't remember who said that first) meaning slow down, enjoy life. Quoting myself, "Life is short, love is long." I love this poem, but have some suggestions.

    paper(s)
    birth (o)f my first child
    She turn(ed) me down
    We finaaly(finally) met up

    Great message for those of us who are too busy to slow down. You'll have to come to an abrupt halt eventually. Wouldn't be better just to slow down first?

    hugs,
    Gail


    Posted By butchiesmom | Feb 5, 2008
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    mysticpoet729 The "Mystic" Poet

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    thank you very much

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