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    CHAMPAGNE TOAST - Nonet

    CHAMPAGNE TOAST (Nonet)


    burnt-orange sunset reflection on

    tranquil waters flowing toward beach

    sparkling wine poured in glasses

    champagne-toast kiss to love

    tender hands caress

    wanton body

    tepid winds

    gently

    blow


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 9, 2006
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    Great poem! I love the form, especially the feeling the reader gets at the end of "fading out", especially when you reinforce it with images of a gentle wind.

    The only line I didn't understand too well was "soft wanton skin", but I think that's just me. I've only heard the word "wanton" used in conjunction with "chicken" and "soup", but I don't suppose what you meant had anything to do with that. Also, did you mean "champagne" or is the misspell intentional?

    BTW, nice avatar ;) .


    Posted By mbironneau | Dec 9, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    Hi Michael:wavey:

    :word_thankyou: for the read and nice comments

    now that you poitned that out "wanton" may be the wrong word choice, I am using "wanton" meaning sexually wanting or desiring...

    I think perhaps I will think on that and may change that line to "wanton body"

    thanks for liking avatar I picked:yayjpic:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 9, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    lol, I did mispell champagne:peekaboo:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 9, 2006
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    this was the best I've read from you, I found you reaching in this one sucessfully I might add lovely poem

    v3sista U Know Me

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    :word_hello:


    Echoes-


    First let me say, this is the 1st opp. I've had 2 read your work. Nice job! I enjoyed the feeling of calmness, love and peace from this. I will continue 2 check on U in the future. Also, I too liked the form U used here.


    V3


    Posted By v3sista | Dec 9, 2006
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    lovely, filled with love and deep emotion; in its brevity, this spoke volumes!
    brava:scores:

    write on,
    sage


    Posted By sage | Dec 9, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    :word_thankyou: so much Erik, your kind words mean much to me:huggles:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 10, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    :thanx: so much, I appreciate yor kindness:yes3:

    glad you liked this form, it is one of favorite forms to write:yayjpic:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 10, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    thanks so much sage, you made my day:toot:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 10, 2006
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    This is a difficult form to write without falling into the abyss of disassociated lines. You have done it well and told a story through form and image. Nice job!


    Posted By Storytime | Dec 10, 2006
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    you're welcome echoes, well deserved!:jump:

    sage


    Posted By sage | Dec 10, 2006
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    wow, Lisa this is a fine example of a nonet, as Sid said these are diffulcult to write and you did a fantastic job with this form:bravo:

    Lisa, I agree with you about that one line, maybe it should be changed to " wanton body" but it works it either way:D


    Posted By Harry | Dec 10, 2006
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    you are quite welcome, much deserved!

    have a great week!

    sage


    Posted By sage | Dec 10, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    :word_thankyou: Sid, I appreciate your kind thoughts:huggles:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 11, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    :word_thankyou: Harry, your comments always mean much to me, thanks for the read:huggles:

    I am still thinking on that line change:friends:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 11, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    :thanx: again sage and you have a great week too:wavey:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 11, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    Harry, I changed that one line...what do you think?:wink2:

    :word_thankyou: for all your help:huggles:

    TTYL:harhar:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 11, 2006
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    I like the change, good job:goodpost:


    Posted By Harry | Dec 11, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    thanks Harry, I like the line change too:yes:


    see you around:air_kiss:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 12, 2006
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