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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Sartor,

    You are so right the Cinquain is such a poetical delight. Just thoughtfully placed syllables about a subject matter. You do have that effortless image. Great job!

    Jerry:dropjaw:

    P.S. I've complicated the form somewhat with my poem titled Wanted Again. Cn you find the sixth cinquain?
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Ahhh Jerry, I directed you to this thread, as I wanted you to view the beautiful Cinquains and how Sartor and other members make the Cinquain indeed effortless. Now, I have to try yours!!!!

    {{{~~~***KIM***~~~}}}:)

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Very nice Sartor! It seem I know you from some where Sator....Where in the web have we met? Because I know of your work!! It as always been outstanding!!

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    Wonder

    Wonder
    I, why there would
    be so many views for
    one tiny little poem? Find I
    wonder!


    :yayjpic:

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    CSL.......I usually write here and on SplashHall Poetry Forums.


    Posted By Sartor | Jun 18, 2007
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    TamareEsperes New Member

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    Is this poetry? I wonder how talent has become so, then again I don't. Its all bull shit that people think is good but give me one reason why you think its good. Quote and tell me. I would like to know. Tell me why he gets replies and I don't............well never mind, I know that you have to be a "click" on all sites so I don't try too hard.

    Tamare

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Tamare........I am not sure who you are directing your reply to.....but if it is I, then I am not sure if I understand your request. Poetry comes in many forms and what is beautiful to one may seem like childish scribbling to another. For instance I am very fond of metered rhyme, but can find very little beauty in free verse. Like art, beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Each finds pleasure in different places. Do I think all the Cinquains in this thread are great? No, but I do think some bring a visual image to my mind that pleases me, therefore I applaud the poet for his/her talent that brings me pleasure. Having said all that, it follows that poetry is not all "cow manure" as you stated.

    I note that you say one gets replies and you do not. First of all, I do not know your work well enough to judge any of it, but I believe you are new to the forum. Have you tried posting on the critique page? The purpose of posting there is so other poets will read your work and tell you if it is good, bad, or mediocre. They will also try to help you improve your style. Be prepared for some sharp criticism. Replies in the forum, usually are posted if the poets and readers like or hate your work.

    Hope this helps clear up some of your thoughts on the forum.

    Sartor


    Posted By Sartor | Jul 27, 2007
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    TamareEsperes New Member

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    Could this be similar to the 'Golden Ratio' Phi? 6.18? Let me know if you know of this ;)

    Tamare

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Tamare.......Personally, in my mind I find no comparison between mathematics and poetry beyond the points that certain poetic forms require a strict adherence to foot and/or syllable count per line, number of lines per verse and/or poem and lastly a defined rhyme scheme.

    Of course, knowing there are so many types of poetry, both recognized as authentic and those simply made up in the mind of the poet, I did take the time to check out phi vs poetry and if you are interested, you may find some information here:

    Phi and Poetry

    Therefore, when you ask, Could this be similar to the 'Golden Ratio' Phi? 6.18? I would have to answer, yes, it is similar.


    Posted By Sartor | Aug 7, 2007
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Autumn~

    [IMG]

    ~AUTUMN~

    Notice
    how summer sheds
    her green as autumn juts
    her dahlia bosoms dyeing
    nature.

    © August 20, 2005 Karen Davies


    Posted By Moonchild | Sep 4, 2007
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Moonlight
    Casting white light
    Upon the shadowed lawn
    While peeking through the leafy limbs
    Midnight


    Posted By Sartor | Sep 4, 2007
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Lovely Sartor!

    [IMG]

    ~JASMINE~

    Blooming
    jasmines perfume
    summers midnight aura
    as yellow petals kiss the moon
    waxing.

    © Karen Davies


    Posted By Moonchild | Sep 12, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    WOW nice poems everyone!
    I think I'll try one :]

    Believe
    when all seems lost
    when all is without hope
    when all others give up trying
    hang on

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    hmm. another one?


    Forgive
    easy to say,
    but always hard to do.
    It is hard to cast off the hurt,
    but try.


    sorry. I've been having a hard time forgiving and talking to someone...

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    The bed
    where once we slept
    no longer holds your shape...
    did you think my heart would hold it
    longer?


    First appeared in Modern English Tanka - Vol. 2, No. 2 . (covering my copy-righted behind!) ;)

    Cinquain are really an amazing form. They force you to think through your ideas and choose your words carefully. I like your saxaphone, Painted Diary! Sartor--"full moon" was beautiful! (And so are everyone else's! I was just a ditz and posted after reading the first page.)
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    :wow: Bitter Irony! That was so amazing...to think...yes....no longer holds your shape...just wow! Thank you for reading my Saxquain also, lol...you are are so right about this form...Cinquains do force one to express often like not before. Additionally, word selection based on syllable count may seem restrictive for some, however, it forces one to creative heights! Best of luck on your mag as well!

    Beautiful Cinquains everyone!!!!!

    {{{~~**Painted**~~}} :wub:

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Forever and always Mr.Sartor, I'll always enjoy your works. This one you have written here, is one more reason why!

    Carmody Carmody

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    The Cinquain is a form that encourages the poet to trim all fat, leaving only the lean and meaningful words to convey the theme. You write it beautifully!


    Posted By Carmody | Oct 22, 2011
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    SuzyQ Member

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    I've read through all the pages of this particular thread and there are some awesome Cinquain posted here. Sartor (where is this poet?) writes beautifully... so polished. I will have to try my hand at one soon.

    SuzyQ


    Posted By SuzyQ | Oct 25, 2011
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    tham Member

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    wow-we
    those were just great
    wish i could do that too
    but i just can't do it right now
    oh well


    Posted By tham | May 22, 2012
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