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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by santui, Jun 15, 2007.



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    Cupid looked deep in my eyes
    blinked, yawned
    then fell asleep.
    choosing unconsiousness
    instead of despair
    at the emptiness
    he saw lurking there
    His brand lit no fire
    in my breast
    just a nagging ache
    echoing a deep and hollow
    sadness
    where its tip lay captive
    pointing steadily at my
    chest.
    As he snored
    my broken heart fluttered
    tripping upon itself
    for this was cupid!
    The salve to my wound.
    Not wanting to frighten him
    from his slumber lest in my haste
    i catch his ire
    I tried to nudge him
    with a finger

    and half awake
    my face he spied
    he blew me a kiss

    :eek:pera-girl:

    but alas, it missed

    me.


    Posted By santui | Jun 15, 2007
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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    How could it miss!

    Santui,

    Great poem. Sad theme! You probably don't want just any ole guy anyway, right.

    This really read well for me. I love the rhyme and while I didn't want to see the poem end the way it did. BRAVO on a well written and expressed poem.

    My FAV:


    Jerry:geeky:

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    hey thats funny :unsure: thats my fav line too ..it kinda means that even with all the relationships that she gets in ( "brand lit no fire") she cant find love even though " it is captive pointing steadily at my chest". she has all the " attributes" for love except -love. :girltender:
    note the word " she" not "me" :sign_back2topic:


    Posted By santui | Jun 15, 2007
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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    just a guess! hehe

    Jerry:biggrin:

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    excellent penning Santui funny witty with a sad theme
    Bear


    Posted By Bear | Jun 15, 2007
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