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    One can only be faithful
    to those whom require faith,
    for faithfulness is shared,
    one, willing to offer,
    the other to receive.

    Hence, the act of faith is not abstract
    it is motion:
    I am faithful,
    you trust in my faith,
    equal parts to the measure.

    I pause:

    I do not trust Dan Rather,
    no, that is not true.
    I do not trust the man
    who chooses the words
    that Dan Rather reads
    while acting impassioned
    while thinking of scotch.

    Peter Jennings I trust.

    Passionate people are never balanced,
    balance people are never passionate,
    why are not people passionate about being balanced?

    Passionate people can be found in
    battlefields, churches, prisons,
    and rutting in beds.

    Balanced people can be found in
    bookstores, libraries, symphonies,
    and rutting in beds.

    Perhaps they are not so different.

    The wolf kills its prey without remorse
    tearing the sodden meat from the bone
    unaware of the life that has ended.

    I buy my meat in sterilized Styrofoam
    removing the soaker pad from the back,
    unaware of the life that has ended.

    I think the wolf is more honest than I.

    Jung believed you and I are connected,
    that our collective consciousness is as one,
    I bet you don't know what I am thinking now,
    Freud believes I just want to screw you,
    Hmm

    The wolf just wants to eat you,
    Hmm

    We are all Dan Rather,
    saying what we believe the script to be,
    carefully wrapping our passions
    in sterilized Styrofoam
    while the wolf within salivates.

    Just once I want to see
    Dan Rather stare thoughtfully
    into the camera
    and passionately proclaim
    "screw you"

    How I would smile….


    Posted By mcglinnen | Aug 8, 2006
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    Dear McGlinnen,
    I had to read this three times because, I really enjoyed this read!! So diffrent, so unique!! Who would of thought to write about Dan Rather and Peter Jennings (whom I adored for, yes, his passion). The metaphors were on point and made me sit back and smile, and say, "Yep, that is so true!" Then to write about the "script" that "the shell of Dan Rather", reads was unlike anything that I have read, in this genre! The following stanzas were, in my opinion, the "Gold Veins", in the Quartz Mine! (Sorry, am a Geologist and Volcanologist)

    The wolf kills its prey without remorse
    tearing the sodden meat from the bone
    unaware of the life that has ended.

    I buy my meat in sterilized Styrofoam
    removing the soaker pad from the back,
    unaware of the life that has ended.

    I think the wolf is more honest than I.

    Ooooooo, that makes my nuerons go wild!!!!!!!!!!!!! Loved it!!!! To equate Dan Rather, Peter Jennings, scripted words, passion, the Wolf, and a sterilized meat backing was phenomenal to me, I enjoyed this immensely!

    This is what I am talkin about, right here! The beauty of this forum, attracting a myriad of diverse palettes, and we are here to bask in all its glory!!!!! BRAVO!!

    Painted Diary aka Kimberly
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    on point

    mcglinnen, must admit to having a good time with this canvas. the bold attitude & vibrancy within the imagery pleasing. know that mi mana kimberly got to quote the strong passages i favored, but still found,

    " Passionate people can be found in
    battlefields, churches, prisons,
    and rutting in beds.

    Balanced people can be found in
    bookstores, libraries, symphonies,
    and rutting in beds..."

    & the conclusion was cool like sleeping in an igloo,

    "Just once I want to see
    Dan Rather stare thoughtfully
    into the camera
    and passionately proclaim
    "screw you"

    How I would smile…."


    this was well worth the read more than once. something i'm sure you've considered publishing, if not already. enjoyed much artist.
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    WHOA! Very eloquently stated piece of poetry MCGLINNEN - This one is memorable - there's lessons enough for each to devour :)

    I do tend to wonder if you think Freud is correct LOL - Not much more I can say about this piece, except for I am adoring the playfulness of your words and the structure you chose for this poem is just AWESOME - Great sharing!

    Thanx!

    Jacquii.


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Just thinking about this one again - re-read it - AWESOME piece - very very nice - exquisite really - Humor is always good, even if someone farts very loudly in church and proclaims "EXCUSE ME!" rather loudly LOL
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    Question: are you saying Peter is the Wolf? lol - There's a tale about Peter The Wolf or something I was read at bedtime as a child...

    Interesting concept to think that we all want to be Peter LOL - Again Great write - I'm looking forward to more from you!

    Thanx for the sharing,

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 31, 2006
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