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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by Jims Inn, Sep 22, 2007.



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    Dry your tears Danielle, do not fear Danielle
    I the garden of your dreams I do belong,
    Turn around Danielle, you have found Danielle
    I am in the sound of every lovers song.


    Lift your eyes Danielle, search the skies Danielle
    You can see me in the clouds that float above,
    Clear your mind Danielle, you will find Danielle
    I am part of everything you say you love.


    Search your heart Danielle, I am part Danielle
    Of the misty morning breeze that kissed your face,
    Raise your hand Danielle,touch the sand Danielle
    I revolve around you like a star in space.


    Touch a flower Danielle, feel the power Danielle
    Of my soul existing in each crimson rose,
    Know the thrill Danielle, feel the chill Danielle
    As I greet you in each gentle breeze that blows.


    Feel the rain Danielle, call my name Danielle
    As from heaven in the storm I come to you,
    Look above Danielle, look with love Danielle
    For in lightning and in thunder I am too.


    As you sleep Danielle, oh so deep Danielle
    I caress your body in your dreams each night,
    As you lie Danielle, as you sigh Danielle,
    I am midnight, I am darkness, I am light.


    Oh my god Danielle, it's so hard Danielle
    To stay away from you for all this time,
    I'd come back Danielle, but I lack Danielle
    The courage that is needed for the climb.


    I grow blind Danielle, I can't find Danielle
    The road that led me to you is now gone,
    I think I die Danielle, but I'll try Danielle
    For I must see you once before I'm done.


    I can't feel Danielle, it's unreal Danielle
    My world is growing darker every day,
    I'm dying Danielle, I'm trying Danielle
    To see your face again is all I pray.


    Will we meet Danielle, oh my sweet Danielle
    Before my weary heart gives up it's beat?
    Oh my own Danielle, I'm so alone Danielle
    God what is this pain what is this heat?


    All is lost Danielle, what a cost Danielle
    But I'll always love you as I said I would,
    I hear no sound Danielle, I'm unwound Danielle
    And darkness falls upon me like a hood.


    Now I die Danielle, it's goodbye Danielle
    I shall return once more I know you'll wait,
    My eyes grow dim Danielle, I'm on the rim Danielle
    Satan waits for me at hades gate.


    Now I'm free Danielle, yes it's me Danielle
    I've come to take you to a better life,
    Do not scream Danielle, it's no dream Danielle
    At last I'm here to take you for my wife.


    See the knife Danielle, oh my wife Danielle
    It's blood that stains the floor a sticky red,
    Do not fight Danielle, we'll unite Danielle
    Now you die and as you do we shall be wed.


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    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 22, 2007
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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    LoL Jim,
    What a scary poem, although it's very well written. It starts so sweet and innocent, I would have never suspected the narrator to be a killer. It has qualities of one of those dreamy hell scenes that gives a person nightmares. It would make a good background song for a psycho thriller.


    Posted By JolieH | Sep 22, 2007
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    very Interesting penning Jim and so beautifully written
    handshakes
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Sep 22, 2007
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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    hi jolieh ... thanx for reading and commenting ...

    luv ya!

    jim
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    thanx for the kind words bear ...

    jim


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 23, 2007
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    :w::o::w: Jim..... quite the twisted write.... Excellent writing.... I kinda wondered at the obsessive use of Danielle's name but it makes sense with the ending... I quite enjoyed it


    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Sep 23, 2007
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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    hi mysty and thanx very much for reading and enjoying ...

    jim


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 23, 2007
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    WOW...took me on quite a ride with this one! Very well written and presented with style. I think this one without the repitition would have lost something...very well done!


    Posted By Benny | Sep 24, 2007
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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    hi benny ... thanx so much for the kind words ...

    jim


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 24, 2007
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