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    Tressles of hair hide her sleepy eyes
    as she lifts her head from the pillow.
    "When will sleep find me?' She whispers.
    Dawn is yet hours away.

    Night after night Malissa wakes.
    Shall dreams never capture her mind?
    Why dream when there is so much to ponder?
    It's as though the weight of the world is on her shoulders.

    Such depth do few take to heart.
    If one is to be saddened, let it not be in vain.
    There are those who cry so far from our hearing
    that we dare not think of them at all.

    Ah, Malissa, but you are pure of heart.
    Your lack of rest is your virtue.
    You long to reach for those who have no bed.
    Your mind craves to feed their souls.
    Your arms wish to hold and comfort them.

    While the world sleeps, your eyes tear.
    Though many of wealth slumber in their beds at such an hour,
    you, with sleepy eyes and tired bones, ask your Lord for help.

    You would give all, if all you had was worth giving.
    In the middle of your own suffering, you long to sacrifice.

    But all you find is sleep has escaped you.

    If only one, good night would come your way
    possibly tomorrow you would be of good cheer
    to those who keep you from slumber.

    Ah Malissa, dearest one, go to sleep.
    If tomorrow should come and God willing you are here,
    there will be no lack of those who need you.
    Calm yourself now and close your eyes.

    Sleep is but a blessing away.
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    (sorry for any spelling errors. My spell check wouldn't work when I posted this)

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    sorry for the spellcheck....

    Hey AMACHRISTIAN - this poem is simply beautiful - Now - I'm not much a fan of the "religious" poetry, but your poem seems to span religion, making its way into what is more aptly the spiritual type....

    The last line of your poem (and really the entire tone of your poem) sets the stage for such a blessing.... Right for the "season" -- seems almost a Thanksgiving prayer...

    Perhaps prayer is too strong a word --- Seems almost a Thanksgiving wish! Distinct difference... Your poem seems like a "beckoning" of sorts to Malissa; that she may have such an acceptance that those more fortunate know so better & take for granted.......

    Hope not to have read into your poem - but it really is a very good write!
    I enjoyed this one immensly - Thanx for sharing it with us AND Happy holidays!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Dec 5, 2006
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    athlone www.poetrypages4u.com

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    Beautiful sentiments - but frustrating

    Very well written. You capture the feelings of "humanitarian conscience" while conjuring sentiments of frustration in helplessness. I too tend to write quite a few "socio-political" comments in verse.


    Posted By athlone | Dec 5, 2006
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    amachristian New Member

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    Thank you both so much for your replies. Even though I used the words, 'Lord', 'God', and 'Blessing', athlone was very correct in her assumtion of the subject matter. Malissa is someone who wishes so to help those in our world who hurt, mourn, are homeless, caught in war, starving, etc. But she hasn't the means to do so on the level she wishes she could. Her heart breaks and sleep doesn't find her because it touches her so deeply. She knows there are many who could make a difference and although some do, she knows it could be more. Near the end of the writing, she's told that her lack of sleep could actually keep her from doing anything to help anyone so for her, sleep is truly the blessing she wishes to bestow on others. It's what will help her bestow anything at all.
    It's very hard for me to write certain poetry, prose or other without the use of God and other atributes to him because for me, He is every part of my life and being. I hope I didn't over step anything in this part of the forum though by seeming to be writing a 'religous' piece, that wasn't my intention.
    Thank you both again.
    Sheri
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    Oh not at all - We welcome all poetry here - Thanx for the explanation/motivation - makes the poem more "understandable" now ;)

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    A beautiful poem, Malissa! Your words of encouragement are as if to a child and even comforted me as i read these words...a very soft, reassuring work!


    Posted By Benny | Dec 6, 2006
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    amachristian New Member

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    Benny,
    Thank you so much for your sweet words. I don't have any close friends with the name Malissa but it came to my mind and seemed to fit. The name just had a poetic sound for some reason, not in a rhyming sense but somehow pure.
    I appreciate your reply.

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