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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by lanaia74, Dec 26, 2006.



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    I don't really comprehend what's going on
    As I watch my queen hold her love as he dies
    A sight that sends chills to the very bone
    I look to my queen for answers my eyes filled with a thousand whys.

    You look at me with tears in your eyes and a solemn face
    The look on your face tells me our future
    Nothing said between us as I know there is no escape from this place
    I know from this place we must somehow deter.

    From the look on your face, you have come to the same conclusion as me
    We know we must escape the wrath of Octavian
    There has to be some way to escape that, see
    If we are caught we will be dragged through the streets of Rome, looking weak in the eyes of all that inhabit the region.

    My queen says,"I will die like a true Egyptian with pride the Egyptian way."
    We dress in our most expensive very best
    We must look our best for the Gods without delay
    We are about to embark on a long journey to a place we can finally rest.

    I sneak the asp in using a basket of figs, see
    You hold the asp letting him strike your breast
    I am your hand maiden, I will follow you even in death to serve you as it was meant to be
    Cleopatra, the queen far better known than the rest.


    Posted By lanaia74 | Dec 26, 2006
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    Interesting work! Very descriptive in your usual way...loved this one.


    Posted By Benny | Dec 28, 2006
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    Dear Lanaia,

    This is yet another magnificent piece from you. Vivid, full of color, on point historically, and beautiful. I can see this and did indeed picture this as a scene from a play, if you will. As per of conversations, you know I am completely, and utterly in awe of your work. It was satisfying to know, that you are a published author, and poet, so that all can share in your splendour!!! Loved it!!!! :bravo:

    ~*Painted*~

    P.S.---->Thank you for the material, as I get ready to make the biggest cup of cocoa, and visit Egyptian heaven for a while reading the material, you sent me.;):D

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