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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    As the glass shatters through night of unrest,
    light scatters with vows of protest,
    Protest as you wish, but
    Helena has golden hair,
    she marks where she spreads sorrow,
    here and there,
    with touch the damned reach points
    where no man came,
    one dream down, one 1lb of sorrow gained,

    I keep feeding and growing until I'm gluttoned out and full,
    prosper aging heroes take your fight don't stall,
    rocks don't change, they just erode,
    night might age the rock with cold,
    but you can't fool a masked unkown,
    intuition favors not the bold,

    Helena will steal as sad and feel your wants and multiply
    your thoughts with fear,
    Helena of the night,
    sometimes called delight,
    will put you through a course impossible to steer,
    this last dream of mine fell like the holy grail,
    with no one to find my mind swells in search of lost time,
    while delight snears secretly holding my steps,
    lost in a fool's path where she sees my path,
    but I no longer know where I'm going,
    one dream down, one 1lb of sorrow gained,

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    Dear Erik,

    This was a fascinating read...my mind went into many, many directions. The strongest vision, I got was a ship at sea, with a full crew, and turbulent currents, and gusty winds, and a crew full of wine and merriment! I loved this. What was your inspiration for this.

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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I like your take on this that would make Helena the name of the ship wouldn't it,
    merriment is much better,
    thanks kim

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    Takes me back to Helena, Greek goddess...still with us, still touching our lives...wonderful visuals. Erik, your work is wonderful and makes my mind work and think of so many things...everyone who reads this can follow easily...your flow is awesome in this one! Another great work from your hand...thank you.


    Posted By Benny | Jan 29, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Benny the name is a good name I chose it for no particular reason,
    yeah this can be many things but to me it sreally one but still so many interpretation are great, thanks benny

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