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    Mark Allinson New Member

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    They speak today of pheromones and genes
    when trying to account for such a state
    most often seen in young folk, in their teens
    or in their twenties, signalling a mate.
    They would not think a man turned fifty-eight
    should be a candidate for such a blast
    of chemicals, or genes, or luck, or fate,
    to blow him forty years back to his past.
    His family and friends would be aghast
    to hear their wrinkled sage bay at the moon
    and warble that he'd found “the one” at last,
    and call him “fool”, or worse, “romantic loon.”
    But they don't know because they were not there
    to breathe the lethal darkness of your hair.



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    Wow! Mouth wide open! Superb!


    Posted By lanaia74 | Oct 22, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Yes MARK - this is a superb write... Ever since I've done the Poetry-Defined section I've earned and/or been rewarded with a very deep respect for "traditional" styles and this sonnet is very beautifully written!

    His family and friends would be aghast
    to hear their wrinkled sage bay at the moon
    and warble that he'd found “the one” at last,
    and call him “fool”, or worse, “romantic loon.”


    I think you doth speak of me in those lines LOL - Very nice piece of writing - Thanx for the sharing and again.... Welcome to the Community :)

    Jacquii.

    [Edited - just reread the title DIAGNOSTIC.... Genius!]


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 22, 2006
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    Mark Allinson New Member

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    Thanks, Ianaia, and Jacquii,

    this was was written recently, about a certain painful experience. I believed that at my age I was immune to such things.

    It didn't work out.

    But at least I got a few poems out of the experience.

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    Hello Mark!
    I thoroughly enjoyed reading this! Great rhymes and a smooth rhythm! Sorry it didn't work out for you. Cupid's arrows do have a way of leaving great big bruises. They hit at any age and none are immune! Ah well, live and learn!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 23, 2006
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    HI Mark!! Awesome Sonnet, dear!! I love the words throughout the entire stanza!! Thank you for sharing your work of art with us!! Sincerely, Stardust.:girltender: :girltender:


    Posted By stardust | Oct 23, 2006
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    Mark Allinson New Member

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    Thanks for those generous comments, Tree and stardust.

    I have a whole series of sonnets which have resulted from the encounter with my "dark lady".

    Maybe later I can post another one.

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