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    My demon's unsheathed while attempting to conceive
    Of the excuse for my queen, my love to be
    These tears flooding my soul and voice
    As I struggle with myself and this difficult choice.
    The succubus in an angels form
    The beauty with lies to disarm my scorn
    Eyes radiating false sincerity
    Enveloping my heart in a screeching harmony.
    Lips a poisons drug of ruin
    A delicate touch imbuing
    Its caress into my flesh
    Slipping off the straps of my emotional dress
    Gazing at me nude with false love in her kiss
    Slipping the restraints around each of my wrists
    Cooing softly a web of deceit
    Stealing me from my fearful retreat.
    My heart delicately breaks
    Unleashing a painful hate
    Towards my own self and my romantic fate
    Halting my attempt to wipe it clean by breaking the slate.

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    I like this a lot. If I were you I would take out a few of the little words though.


    Posted By BloodyTea | Mar 12, 2016
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    "The", "My',and 'A', you don't need as many of these as you think.


    Posted By BloodyTea | Mar 12, 2016
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