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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    We've both walked in darkness,
    and shuttered up buildings,
    had mixtures of love and faith healings,

    My mind is a tunell that keeps you safe,
    so dream of me, my love,

    Your mind is a rude awakening,
    yet I still dream of you my love,

    As long as you exist,
    in both realities,
    your fragrance and hair of Sif,
    makes me speak irrationalities,

    So don't mistake me as a glance,
    I've kept you for such a long time,
    and when we cross realize that our dreams will turn into fine memories,
    so when we turn to each other after long years,
    we can still look at each other and say,
    I dreamt of you my love, my dear.

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    WOW Eric!!

    I really liked this one. Very touching and surreal. The imagery is great.

    Whom ever your love is or will be I'm sure would dearly love this poem. Great work.



    Blessed be

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Sally I suppose they would

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    I like it...I really like this one.

    "your fragrance and hair of Sif,
    makes me speak irrationalities,"

    that line is absolutely brilliant...telling in its description of the irrationality of love....to be so entwined into someone, that you become irrational....Lord knows, Ive been there before.

    a nice and neat capture of real emotions.


    Posted By dazamaru | Mar 18, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thank you very much dazamaru

    I'll assume you know who Sif was then,

    I'm so glad to get a response from you
    , thanks
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    My Dearest Erik,

    I absolutely love this piece. I love when you write this way. It is so real with emotions pouring like syrup, so lovely, and quite romantic. You put her on a pedestal, and make ME feel, reading it, that it could be for me. That is some powerful writing. She is so lucky, when that time comes. I thought the verse I have highlighted was simply masterful!!! To think of such a love to make me speak irrational is amazing, and is very true. Ahhh, the Goddess, with hair the color of Gold, and / or of ripe wheat. Brilliant metaphor. Also, did you know that Sif is a volcano on the love planet--->Venus! Scientific tidbit there, lol. I am in awe of this, as I am in awe of you. Take Care Erik. Brilliant, and yes a 5 PD rating!!

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}}:bravo:

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks for the space fact,
    someone has to keep the goddeses alive,

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    what a wonderful write Erike I truly like this poem
    handshakes
    tom


    Posted By Bear | Mar 18, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Thomas
    I'm glad that you do
    handshakes back

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    Awwww Erik! You know, I really love your book - Storms of Life, but when you let your romantic side come out like this, I love it even more! Have you thought of doing a book of romantic poetry, Erik? Now, THAT would be a MUST HAVE!
    Great write!
    - Tree.


    Posted By Altree94 | Mar 18, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    hey Tree,
    thats a really good idea,
    I'm not releasing another book for awhile though,
    I think it will be mostly romantic poetry though with acouple of my best humanitarian ones mixed in
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    Erik, it's really awesome that you are exploring your romantic side more thoroughly. You are exceptionally well suited to it.

    The lines below speak of everlasting love, love that supercedes a lifetime. and when you write of Sif it gives a sureal feel to the poetry. Lovely!

    I've kept you for such a long time,
    and when we cross realize that our dreams will turn into fine memories,
    so when we turn to each other after long years,
    we can still look at each other and say,
    I dreamt of you my love, my dear.


    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey ERIK - I don't know if I'm diggin the bunny LOL - but this poem is quite nice - It's a bit different style for you - I don't think I've read a love poem from you before - which is quite a nice surprise:

    so when we turn to each other after long years,
    we can still look at each other and say,
    I dreamt of you my love, my dear.


    This is just beautifully written piece ERIK - not much more I can say about it, other than very nice work. Nice surprise seeing a love poem from you.

    Thanx for the sharing!

    Jacquii.

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    hey nomad yeah everlasting love is the best kind,
    thanks

    msJ I like the bunny cause its grin,
    thanks msJ gla dyou read something differnt from me I have allot of romance poem actually kim could tell ya
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    OMFG - ERIK I hope you didn't change the bunny because of my silly self
    Anyway - nice read - I'll have to look for more of your romantic poems a little later :blush2:

    Jacquii.

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    well the change yes but the dove fits my poems so thanks
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    hmmm - I don't think I'm quite happy with this, as you've never really struck me as the "dove" type. Poetry aside - I think we kinda like erikestabrook as he is.... But then again - I suppose the bunny was quite a surprise as well:drinks:

    I freedom-chant!

    Jacquii.

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    dude you're really startin to outgrow yourself. I see it very lyrically too. Would make a good Sting song.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Mar 21, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    msJ I'm not the dove type but I like birds allot,
    sheesh why don't I let you pick the avatar already jk

    awesome zaac I always wanted a poem that could be lyrics as well
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - I know you especially like cardinals, but doves :crazy:
    OKOKOK - I'll stop giving you a hard time about your avatar LOL

    Jacquii.

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