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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by zaac, Jan 4, 2007.



    zaac Banned

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    silken wind flows through curtains
    wrapping the ocean's voice 'round your face
    breathing kisses across your smile


    Posted By zaac | Jan 4, 2007
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    ncie poem zaac I expeected a tropical setting as well wish their was but it can be imagined
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    Dear Isaac,

    Simply beautiful, as you already know how I feel about this poem. ;)

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    A beautiful poem, great imagery and well-written but has too many syllables to be called haiku. I know that haiku comes in many shapes and forms but all have 17 syllables or less.


    Posted By Altree94 | Jan 9, 2007
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    ok...ok....

    excuse my stupidity or naivete or however you choose to describe it lol. I was under the misguided impression that it was 5 words 7 words 5 words...not syllables damnit.

    does this mean i lose my JPIC poet trading cards?

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Jan 9, 2007
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