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    Benny New Member

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    She whispers all men
    are read as bad fiction,
    knowing almost certain
    what lies on the next page;
    little spontinaity lives
    where boys dwell.

    Caught, hands in pockets,
    silly grin plastered
    across a face open
    and easily read.

    She has to be aware my eyes are frozen,
    her every move draining what strength I claim,
    her mere presence toys with my mind.

    Caught, riding her scent to far islands
    where she whispers I am easily read...


    Posted By Benny | Nov 18, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    lovely poem, the last line is very enigmatic,
    I liked all of this poem,
    it was appealing in the words has an
    air of mystery about it,
    and it reveals a very bold secret or wish at the end,
    really great poem I enjoyed it allot

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    Great poem! Mature womem including myself,so many feel this way, but I was lucky, I fond the right one! VERY well done!:wave: :bed:


    Posted By lanaia74 | Dec 6, 2006
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    Benny New Member

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    Thank you Erik and lanaia! Glad this one spoke to you two!


    Posted By Benny | Dec 6, 2006
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    Nikos Tselepides New Member

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    This is an erotic poem, carefully written, and well-crafted.
    It would be even better if the series of dots (.....) were removed. It makes no difference to the reader and the dots always look bad on any page, printed or web.

    Many thanks.

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