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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    Yesh i drewed that ugly pic D: (bad spelling on purpose everyone xD)

    Emo Love

    The silent rain outside,
    Echoes a sorrowful mood,

    Gray splashed sky,
    On the Heavens canvas,

    Crystal waves crashing,
    Onto foamy shores,

    The water inching up to you,
    A sensation into your pores,

    Hand in hand, you’re by my side,
    A loyal partner to see me through,

    Shadowed wolves with diamond eyes,
    Howl at the painted golden moon,

    The sound of hooves bearing,
    Over the velvet Earth,

    Celestial beasts with manes of silk,
    Enchant us with all of Heavens worth,

    The harmonic ocean tempo,
    The feel of one flying,

    Doesn’t come near the sensation I get,
    When your arms connect over me,

    A glistening emerald staircase,
    An opal-shinned beacon,

    The feel of you through my hair,
    Like a lullaby I’m swayed to sleep,

    Dance among the stars,
    Every shinning one,

    The purity of your heart,
    Shines greater than the sun,

    Listen to the ocean,
    Dolphins silently frolicking,

    The shore fossilized with our imprints,
    Embedded with it our hearts too,

    For you see my dear what I’m trying to say,
    Is simply that I do love you.


    Posted By Aumakua | Sep 15, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Simply lovely!! I really do love the imagery that you employ with such sure strokes of descriptive love. The artwork was better than anything I could come up with, so woohoo!! :yay:

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    I thought this poem was quite beautiful actually RIHA - And since the title even has the "emo" I moved it to Emotional Romantic :p --- But yeah - you write with such a precise thought in mind - Each line flows so wonderfully that it leads to a wonderful end:

    Crazy picture aside - I see that there is a lot of emotion that went into creating this poem - It shows! It reads beautifully.

    Thanx for sharing ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Sep 18, 2007
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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    Oh wow o.o

    Thanks you guys for reading and critiquing it ^^


    Posted By Aumakua | Sep 19, 2007
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    this is the sweetest read I've had in a long time. To say it flows is an understatement. It oozes as well out every pore you mentioned.

    you take the reader on a pillowsoft ride through the middle of a muse, tell a story, and teach us something in a few words that are directly aimed at our imagination. You hit the mark and made it look easy. My respects.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Sep 20, 2007
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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    o.o.... i didn't think it was that good o_O


    Posted By Aumakua | Sep 20, 2007
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    zaac Banned

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    well it is

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Sep 20, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Cool photo...one pretty eye! You know you can post photos in Face of the Artiste...we would love to see your face! And the poem IS that good!!

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    It all has been said and I fell in love with this lil' piece of paradise. Loved the drawing as well. :bravothanx:

    PD :)

    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    Thankies (again xD)

    I'll post my pics up in alil bit ;D


    Posted By Aumakua | Sep 22, 2007
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    this is what happens when pure untainted passion flows through your soul...
    such a wonderful blissfull read.. i actually felt at peace even though my life is filled with turmiol right now.. you let me escape for a brief moment... i only wish it was longer then that...

    cant believe that i missed this.. thank God i checked it out.. and i agree with you.. i dont think there is any better title then the one you came up with...
    thank you for being alive and porducing beatiful works of art such as this...


    and keep em comin'!!!!!!!

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    Hey now Aumakua,

    Wow, where was this one hiding? Great visuals......
    I see passion and fire within your words - nice penning.......

    Yesh, this IS good.......


    Posted By lasher | Oct 10, 2007
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