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    Melismatic New Member

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    Repetitive visual stimuli encased in the mind’s eye

    Escalating temperatures change the atmospheric pressure causing an eruption of volcanic magnitude

    Disdainful sneers from the crowd inundate the starboard profile of the individual

    The periphery is thoroughly ignored

    Center focus is slim, narrow, with little chance of optimization

    The moment has been maximized to its fullest potential

    And yet holds no satisfaction


    Posted By Melismatic | Aug 23, 2006
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    ashame

    no one has posted anything to this gem. i can't help but think how your style/ voice is so reminding of another poet smearypegion on another board with how you weave words into your canvas. had to quote this closing passage of dynamic power,

    "The moment has been maximized to its fullest potential

    And yet holds no satisfaction."

    keep doing your thang huh.

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    Thank you for your thoughts! I was never really sure about this poem - was it "finished"..does it need work..etc...I may still revamp it at a later date but glad you like it as is :)


    Posted By Melismatic | Aug 28, 2006
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    Dear Melismatic,

    Please do not alter the powerful liquid lyrics that are painted on such a small canvas. Your words are like magic in this piece, and kept me intrigued and captivated from beginning to end. Beautiful Poet. Much Luv...yeah reminiscent of smeary Ariono. Take Care.

    Painted Diary aka Kimberly:poof-gone:

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