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    The Universe
    Of mystery and illumination
    Keeps its secrets
    In enlightened expanse
    The stars dance
    With the moon
    In celestine darkness
    Light plays with them
    From a solar distance
    Like an echo
    From a far mountain


    Posted By mslit | Apr 23, 2008
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    Hello!

    I enjoyed reading this poem, especially with the ending of it I think that it concluded the poem well and I especially liked the last two lines "Like an echo
    From a far mountain." I felt like you created good imagery by not that many words to describe what was happening with the poem, and that is great. Thank you for sharing!


    Posted By SarahNSH | Apr 24, 2008
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Jo, well...this poem encompasses one of my favorite subjects...the celestial bodies that silently look down upon us. Lovely and descriptive!

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    So Beautiful & Serene. I'm lovin it! Dah Dah Dah Dun!

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    Love the ethereal images.
    Very pretty! Great capture
    of the cosmos. Excellent job!


    Posted By Moonchild | May 20, 2008
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    mslit New Member

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    Thanks for reading my "stuff"! I am a little behind on reading and posting these days.


    Posted By mslit | May 20, 2008
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