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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    laying
    beneath moonglow
    on blanket of green grass
    counting falling stars, craving your
    caress


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 7, 2006
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    very nice cinquain:bravo:

    one thing, how about "craving" instead of "longing"

    just a thought, but I love this, your talent caresses my soul:delicious:


    Posted By Harry | Dec 7, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    Hey Harry:wink2:

    thanks for the suggestion, read and nice comments, I will use "craving" I think it works better than "longing" :D


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 7, 2006
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    good change craving is a very good word of desire,

    I like this because it was serene too me and put me in a dreamy state
    for a little while reflects good writing

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    This is very nicely expressed! Good write!


    Posted By Storytime | Dec 7, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    :word_thankyou: Erik, I appreciate the read and comments


    :word_thankyou: Storytime


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 7, 2006
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    yw lisa
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    Excellent, once again Echoes!!!!! ;)

    I think I will try my hand at a few later......:prankster:

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    yeah "craving" works much better:wizard: :friends:


    Posted By Harry | Dec 7, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    Hi Kim, thanks so much!

    I hope you try them they are fun to write:yayjpic:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 8, 2006
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    more more suggestion, if I may

    "counting falling stars as I crave your"


    just a thought of mine, but it is fine as it is:cheers:


    Posted By Harry | Dec 8, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    I like that that too, but I think I will keep it as it is for now:harhar:

    If you have anymore feel free to post them, I always welcome your suggestions:huggles:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 8, 2006
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    Lisa, as I said it works either way for me:give_heart2:

    like yor new signature pic:yes3:

    TTYL:D


    Posted By Harry | Dec 8, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    :word_thankyou: for liking my sig pic:peace:

    we'll talk soon:give_heart2:


    Posted By Echoes | Dec 8, 2006
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