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    While walking through a field today, I tripped upon a rock of gray,
    then struck my head upon that stone where I blacked out there all alone.

    A dream soon took me to a place, a crisp clear vision of your face,
    your blue eyes shone their loving glow, your golden hair was let to flow,
    upon bare shoulders naturally, as it cascaded down on me.

    You placed a warm hand to my face, which caused my heart to pound and race,
    then brought your breath so close to mine, and whispered only one small line.
    You said... "I Love You.. yes I do, I'll always be here just for you".

    Which forced my dreaming eyes to tear, for suddenly I had no fear.
    No fear of ever losing you, the one I've searched for my life through.
    The one so lovely, warm, and kind, the one I thought I'd never find.

    I tried to force my lips to move, to say the words so I could prove, that all
    held feelings deep inside, are feelings that I cannot hide. But words don't come
    so easily, while deep within a dream you see, although I tried so desperately to
    tell you what you mean to me. I failed for I just could not talk, that darned
    old stupid granite rock!

    Suddenly as I came to, a real world ended dreams of you, as birds were
    singing up above, to rouse me from this dream of love. So there I was
    standing tall, my head still clearing from the fall,
    oh please just let me fall again, return me back to where I'd been !

    Back to you within that dream, as crazy as that just may seem.
    Quite foolishly I realized, and thought of you as I surmised,
    that I don't need a dream to see..... I have you in reality!

    Somehow I feel it truly seems, we all do need our "Field of Dreams"
    Which let our minds believe our hearts, and bring us closer to the parts.
    The parts which all too rarely seem ..... are captured in a loving dream.


    Posted By Juzjon | May 16, 2007
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    Dear John :giftrose:,

    :wow: This was incredible! I love storems as I call them (story + poem). This one took me there with you and I was there in the plush. When you said you will post this, I could not wait. It captured me from beginning to end. You have a talent with the golden pen I see, and I am sure going to look for your posts. We all need "A Field of Dreams", and thank you for sharing yours with me. I gave this an excellent rating! Fantabulous! Thanks for sharing this with us John. :bravothanx:

    {{{{{~~~***KIMBERLY***~~~}}}}}

    Juzjon New Member

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    That was a huge compliment Kimberly and I thank you very much for making me feel so welcomed here at the forum.

    Warm Hugz,

    Juz


    Posted By Juzjon | Jun 4, 2007
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    Dear Juz :hug:,

    You are quite welcome, and we are blessed to have you. So keep'm comin, lolol. I'll be lookin for ya! ;)2

    {{{{{~~~***KIM***~~~}}}}

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    Ahhhhhh, "The field of Dreams" of love.

    I felt this poem so vividly. Your heartfelt charms was so surreal which curled the toes of this reader.

    Expertly written Juz! I loved it.


    Blessings

    Juzjon New Member

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    Sally,

    To make someone smile is worth the day, to make them laugh is worth a week, to curl their toes? ....hmmmmm, priceless !!!!!

    Thank you, Thank you,

    Juz


    Posted By Juzjon | Jun 6, 2007
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