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  1. Magical

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    Through clouds of gold
    and silver streams
    and dusk's reflecting light
    I find my way to Never-land,

    with times of uncertainty
    and moments of clarity
    that point the way.

    The dust may fill my shoes, at times,
    but the light will lift my wings
    as I find my way
    to Never-land.

    The taste of its golden nectar
    rests upon the horizon,
    tempting me,
    offering me its cup of love
    and the choice to leave
    the path well travelled behind,

    as I walk on
    to a new terrain
    that I feel in my heart
    and have always known in my spirit.

    There I walk hand in hand
    with the god light within
    that knows me
    and shows me I can do no wrong
    —have done no wrong—
    for the birth of the spirit
    is known in innocence
    and embraced in love

    in that place
    that some call
    Never-land.
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    It wonderful,never land this is like a child hood memory


    Posted By Wind | Oct 12, 2012
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  3. Magical

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    I think its a place our inner children wish to live.
    Thanks for our comment.

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    very good, only thing is I'd have liked the descriptive elements to have been longer, people get insucure and think after a page that they've lost their audience, poetry is meant to go on as long as you like
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    yes I agree with Erik ... this poem feels like MORE .. there is something missing. You have a great start to something magical. Please don't stop there... bring us that magic. I think it will be the bestest piece I have ever read if you can pull it off Morning Star. I will keep checking back as this poem has such promise.
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    Posted By Mysty | Oct 13, 2012
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    It reminded me of the end of the day sunset just before sleep time. Nice. Also reminiscent of the sunset of life just before death. It gives me a feeling of sereneness and happiness.
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    Posted By Mayflow | Nov 22, 2012
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    The entire poem reads like a swan song but Im a bit partial to these lines, its a line for the freaks who make their own paths away from what the multitudes keep trudging on day after day and the follow this chosen path with its brambles and nails and its dark alleys, with its rosy patches and beside green acres tireless and convinced . Love this!
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    Posted By JONATHAN | Nov 22, 2012
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  6. Magical

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    Thanks Jonathan for your reply. So glad you liked "Finding Neverland"
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    I like this poem very much so Morning Star -- It's a serene depiction of what can be ... whenever it is that we reach the 'Promised Land' so to say. Promised Land // Neverland - kind of synonymous I'd say. Anyway - this made for a nice read = Thanks for sharing.

    J.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Nov 25, 2012
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  8. Magical

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    Thank you very much. So glad you liked it.

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