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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Foot steps echo empty halls,
    candelabras flicker, a spirits breath
    brings sweat beads to her flesh.
    She begins to toss, wakes,
    follows her heart beat
    into the dark garden.
    A crow on the roof top flutters, a fright
    to masters touch at her finger tip.
    It flies to tree tops warning others.
    She laughs without sound.
    Toad and cricket songs carry on the wind,
    and wolves howl a beckon to her soul.
    ~
    across the courtyard,
    Castle gates raise high,
    jagged iron spikes detour visitors.
    he steps barefoot through dry leaves,
    her satin gown flows with gusts
    that toss leaves across the path.
    She wraps one hand round the cold steal
    bar as the other finds,
    resting against the warmth
    of her beating heart,
    a skeleton key on silver chain.
    She lets herself through.
    ~
    A full moon plays lost and found
    behind gray clouds that drift
    swiftly over the dark forest.
    Wind draws all in its path toward him.
    He waits at the entrance to eternity
    his red collared cape flaps
    against a black winged steed
    that steps impatiently, frothing mouth,
    steaming nostrils.
    She runs in small steps, calling:
    "My love, my love,"
    reaching for him. Without thought,
    she's with him, arms wrapped tight
    all of passion pressed to him.
    They disappear in a flash of darkness.


    Posted By JolieH | Apr 27, 2008
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    Dear Jolie,

    Just glanced for right now since it's after 1 in the morn....BUT...I tell ya', I want to take my time reading this gem! Tis my genre :yay: and oh boy I can't wait! Coming back later today!

    PD :)
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    Dear Jolie,

    The descriptives are fascinating! I could envision all as the details are so vibrant and believable. The storem (story + poem) as I call it...is executed well and tis well written. I love the build up and the classic element of this piece. Vladimir and maiden disappear in a "Flash of Darkness"! I love love love this, excellent raiting, and going into my favorites! Awesome storem!

    Kim :yay:

    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Thanks Kim,
    This is my first attempt at a Vampire poem. Your compliments are respected and appreciated. I was contemplating doing a series as a short story.


    Posted By JolieH | Apr 28, 2008
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    DO IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Kim :p

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    invitingly romantic


    Posted By BekiLynn | Apr 30, 2008
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