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    jakeminick McGonagall's Ghost

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    Develop an ego enough to lift the human essence above the conceptions sitting on pedestals
    Fat and fucking lazy, with the give me your hypnotized time killing and weigh your efforts directly into the stomach of those who surround this with hunger growing.
    Infatuated with what this symbol has given them,

    They surround
    And eat each other in the name of sacrifice to collective evolution.

    Hidden hinters playing with the populace,
    As a human would watch the potential of kittens
    And assuming that this is the best way to go about ascendance.
    Malarkey…

    Chuckling at those on the bottom,
    While ignoring the sadistic implements
    Common to climbing the savage system
    (Changing pure passions of humans to toxic emblems).

    A monstrous sacrifice,

    That only the truly unique
    Can make.

    These things weigh down
    On the trees
    That are built
    Of humanity
    (Growing to the next transformation).

    But we squirm as habitual vines.
    Wrapping around the lies
    Of monetary pharaohs,
    And continue firing messages
    Against the billboards
    Forever.


    Posted By jakeminick | Nov 9, 2012
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Had to add 2 lines there at the end LOL - This piece is majestic really. Some sort of political bent within = "Malarkey" made me giggle, especially considering the amount of political pundits that would giggle right along with me. Possibly all of them hating Democrat-sy - slanting silly eye-assault at VP Biden...? :glare:

    Again though - these abstract ideas (so it seems to me) spill directly on to page, a bloody assault of rapid-fire poetry.

    Thoroughly enjoyable this read. What's the inspiration?
    Thanks for the share!

    J.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Nov 12, 2012
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    jakeminick McGonagall's Ghost

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    ahh...thank you Jacquii. your comment makes me feel all warm inside :) , and it gives me a sense that once in a while i actually have something worth posting. thank you for what you do.

    at first i thought those last two lines were mine and i just didn't remember writing them, ha. add 16 more, i don't care :)
    take care.

    oh yeah, the inspiration is mostly from this song:

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    Posted By jakeminick | Nov 14, 2012
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL @ "A transgendered African-American woman is facing trial for murder after blablabla..."

    I KNEW this piece was inspired in part by some sort of political motif. And wow! This is THE JAM. A music with solid lyric base, makes ya go "hmmmmmm" as your poem did for me.

    Yeah - a solid piece which lead me to say, "These abstract ideas (so it seems to me) spill directly on to page, a bloody assault of rapid-fire poetry." --- It's quite interesting to know that your inspiration too was a bloody assault of rapid-fire lyrics... Okay - I'm mumbling LOL - hope this makes sense :D


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    jakeminick McGonagall's Ghost

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    hahaha. thanks again. i love that dude. he's my favorite-est rapper on the planet :)
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    Posted By jakeminick | Nov 17, 2012
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