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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    FRUITS OF LIFE ~ VILLANELLE

    Fruits of life on our table are laid.
    Though sour we sup from love's grapevine.
    From birth to death a price is paid.

    When heart we need we get a spade
    then lost where do we draw the line?
    Fruits of life on our table are laid.

    Sometimes ourselves we wish to trade
    with someone else whose life is fine.
    From birth to death a price is paid.

    Sometimes the parts we play are jade
    but still with grapes we make the wine.
    Fruits of life on our table are laid.

    Autumns thrive as summers fade
    yet somehow sun will always shine.
    From birth to death a price is paid.

    Our lives are not always self made.
    Fate can control a life like mine.
    Fruits of life on our table are laid.
    From birth to death a price is paid.

    © February 25, 2006 Karen Davies


    Posted By Moonchild | Jan 22, 2008
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    this was an awesome villanelle,
    it really strikes a point in a very sharp way,

    Terence Member

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    Hi moonchild, it's a bit hard to read in places but, yes, we have to deal with what life hands us, whether good or bad.

    Good to see you trying the form, Terence


    Posted By Terence | Jan 22, 2008
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    reasonrhymer New Member

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    Hey Karen,

    I like the way this read,

    especially liked:

    When heart we need we get a spade
    then lost where do we draw the line?
    Fruits of life on our table are laid
    .

    Interesting read on "fate". I kind a like to think
    we deal those hearts and spades and when lost hopefully
    know when and where to draw that line.

    At least from that viewpoint
    I can maintain some sanity, otherwise for me I do feel lost.

    When You "Think" You Haven't A Choice.
    THINK ANOTHER THOUGHT.


    rr

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you Erika.
    I appreciate your kind words and
    am glad you like it :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Jan 23, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Hi Terence, I did a bit more than just try the form.
    I have been doing them for several years now and have quite a bit of them.
    Sorry you found it hard to read in places but
    glad you liked it for the most part :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Jan 23, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Hi RR, I have to disagree with you cause I don't
    believe we deal our own cards. Even in the card games
    someone else deals them to us and if people are going to keep
    trying to knock you down how are you suppossed to move or breath?
    They should have respect, decency and heart to not do that.
    Thank you for reading though!


    Posted By Moonchild | Jan 23, 2008
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    reasonrhymer New Member

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    Karen,

    I did like the poem, the flow and even the meaning and I feel like you describe (often).
    Your writes are always thought provoking and I like to think at least sometimes.
    But I do feel we have some choice, It's kind of like you say,

    "...trying to knock you down how are you suppossed to move or breath?
    They should have respect, decency and heart to not do that."


    I think we have the choice to like you say deal "...with respect, decency and a heart..." I think we "CAN" deal those cards to others and likely if we do we don't get so many bad hands coming back. Kind of like Karma (can we deal good karma) I guess that is what I meant.

    No disrespect intended, just some of my rambling thougths.

    Again I did like you piece, You definitely "dealt" a good poem here.

    hugs,

    RR

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Yes now I understand what you're saying RR.
    It does seem to be karma. Thanks hon(hugs)


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 5, 2008
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