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    Just found this one in MsJ's Types of Poetry section and had to try it!

    Zejel - a humorous poem, usually 8 syllables per line, but this can vary. First verse is 2 or 3 rhyming lines and following verses are 3 rhyming lines and then another line that rhymes with the last line of the first verse. For more in-depth information see the "Types of Poetry" section. Zejel: http://jpicforum.info/showthread.php?p=3412#post3412

    Garden Pride

    I plant my ivies and flowers,
    leaving growth to nature's powers.

    I take great pride in my plant's bed.

    English Ivy, Wandering Jew,
    my Moses plant is pretty too!
    I love to find ones that are new.

    All of them get very well fed.

    I planted one and was amazed,
    at how it spread and why it raised,
    shouts of laughter and was not praised.

    Near the root it was turning red.

    Healthy green leaves in sets of three,
    the bed was completely weed-free.
    Nothing was wrong that I could see.

    But 'twas poison ivy instead!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 18, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Similar to the Irish Limerick indeed! I love this poem TREE - it flows so well and is a prime example of Zejel type :yes:

    I won't bore you with blablabla LOL - but I will highlight my favorite line/stanza:
    beautiful! Very nice share - Thanx!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 18, 2006
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    Sealiah Poetic Dancer

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    I really like how it turns out to be poison ivy. Talk about a shocker!

    And the humor? It was certainly appreciated in the wee hours of the morning. Think I'll have this picture running through my head for a while.


    Posted By Sealiah | Oct 18, 2006
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    Altree94 VIP Member

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    LOL! Thank-you Sealiah & Ms J! This is actually a true story! Sometimes, I just have to learn about things the hard way!

    MsJ: TY also for putting in the link to the appropriate section!

    Sealiah: TY! I love making people smile, so it seems that this little Zejel has served it purpose. It was fun to write too!

    Thanks again for taking the time to read and comment - very much appreciated!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 19, 2006
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    VERY well done!


    Posted By lanaia74 | Nov 20, 2006
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    a good read, love the end:bravo:


    Posted By Harry | Nov 20, 2006
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    Amzy A friend, Well met.

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    A cute poem, certainly humorous, but not a Zéjel.

    A Zéjel's rhyme scheme is: aaa bbba ccca ddda eeea .... for as many verses as you wish. Contrast this with your aab cccb dddb eeeb.


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    Altree94 VIP Member

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    TY to Lanaia, Harry and Amzy for your replies!

    Lanaia and Harry - Glad you enjoyed it, there is nothing I like more than making someone smile!

    Amzy: I followed the example that MsJ posted in the Poetry Defined section. Looking at it again, I see that the example doesn't follow the explaination exactly, either. Where did you get your definition? Please let me know! TY!


    Posted By Altree94 | Nov 22, 2006
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    Amzy A friend, Well met.

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    Posted By Amzy | Nov 22, 2006
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    TY Amz! Looks like I'll have to try this one again!


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    HI MY DEAR TREE!! WOW!!...I love it!! Your dexterity in writing is certainly surpassing my expectations. You indeed, magnetize the readers with your awesome Poem!! I love the rhyme you use!! You are an EXPERT IN POETRY!! Congratulations, Poet!! God Bless You, Tree!! Love, from Stardust.:word_thankyou:


    Posted By stardust | Nov 23, 2006
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    Altree94 VIP Member

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    LOL, Starry! I am No expert, that is for sure!
    This form is not right, as Amzy pointed out to me. I have written another one and now I have corrected the errors that I made with this one.
    The new one is called "Demon Thoughts". It's about lies and what they do to us. Not as light-hearted as this one, but not totally depressing either.
    Thank-you so much for your kind words, my friend!


    Posted By Altree94 | Nov 25, 2006
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    HI SWEET TREE!! Thank you for your prompt reply!! I would like to know, if you TEACH POETRY. Do you??...You have written lovely Didactic Poems. I am learning from you. Thank you, sweetheart Tree!! Hugs. Stardust.:air_kiss:


    Posted By stardust | Nov 25, 2006
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    Starry! I am No expert, that is for sure! Certainly NOT a teacher.
    This form is not right, and I have written another in which I have corrected the errors that I made with this one.
    The new one is called "Demon Thoughts". It's about lies and what they do to us. Not as light-hearted as this one, but not totally depressing either.


    Posted By Altree94 | Nov 27, 2006
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