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    With honour if we have to breathe
    we should remain upto the teeth
    Even if a sword pierces not
    keep that shine covered in sheath
    who is the foe is known to none
    that having wear is underneath
    weak may not enjoy the green
    with poisonous being there in heath
    even when I claim not love
    how if living making them seethe
    one having heard not kind word
    for what to receive with a wreath
    with gaiety 'Mir' to make of
    people say is the day of Eid.

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    Very very interesting Mohammad ... I am gonna have to read this a few times just to get the real feel of it. I think I know what your poem is saying but not sure. Definitely gonna come back to this one.


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    Posted By Mysty | Feb 16, 2008
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    Dear Mohammad,

    This is a very interesting read. What was your inspiration for this piece? Very powerful images, content, and execution. However, before I give a proper comment I too will come back to read and await your response. Take care.

    Kimberly :)

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    Respected Miss Mysty and Kimberly; May you be happy!
    I am glad to see your comments. Gazel is the type where the topic may vary in verses also the last verse may contain a nickname chosen for poetry and addressed. Being experienced hope you have got the theme of poem more clearly. Thankyou.

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    Respected Miss Kimberly; May you be happy!
    I am happy to see your brief and comprehensive comment.
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    Hi Mohammad... I have tried to understand this but ..... all I can get is . one should remain honorable.... and keep the weapons but keep them unused. .... because we have not met our real enemy yet. That the real enemy is earth ......I don't know please enlighten me as I am sure I have this wrong. I want to understand.

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    Posted By Mysty | Feb 16, 2008
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    O Miss Mysty! That is a big job and seems like in heavens one be answerable to his lavishly mistakes, OK please have the answer for each verse;
    1-If one desires to be with honour must be armed and strong.
    2-even if one has not to attack must not shun arms.
    3-there are many who deceive and actually are not those who intend to be a friend.
    4-weak people often suffer the hardships brought upon them by others, those who find them unprotected.
    5- by claiming love one becomes guilty and I even done not that do what if they are not pleased only seeing me alive.
    one having heard not kind word
    for what to receive with a wreath
    6-In the life of one others do harm or no good then what is to have kind words about after death.
    with gaiety 'Mir' to make of
    people say is the day of Eid
    7- (Eid is the festivel of Muslims) and Mir is made aware and have to celebrate joyously as others say that is the Eid day.

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