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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Glass Harp - Haiku

    Hands aged like fine wine
    Strum goblets with moist fingers
    Celestial ice chimes.

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    Beautiful, PD! Made me think of when I would fill cups of water and tap them to make music on! Thank goodness I got a piano, water glasses were way out of tune! LOL!


    Posted By Altree94 | Nov 24, 2006
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    Can feel the goblets..
    ......... chimeing oh yes. :girl-LOL:


    Posted By Jeez | Nov 24, 2006
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    Can feel the goblets..
    chime................ing
    oh................. yes. :girl-LOL:


    Posted By Jeez | Nov 24, 2006
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    LOL @ Ms Tree and Jeez!! Thank you Ms Tree and Jeez for sharing in my ku. I am pleased you liked it. Thanks again for taking time to read and for your uplifting comments.

    Painted
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    For some different music, I do suggest listening to Christmas Music composed with the "Glass Harp", as it is most beautiful. It is not to most tastes, however, I like it, and just wanted to share. Thanks

    Painted

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    painted this was exceptional,
    a haiku is all about metaphors,
    and the ending really did those well which makes a great haiku,

    and leaves the reader enchanted or surrounded by a feling of beauty
    thats a great haiku as well which makes yours super super great
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Thank you so much Erik for the wonderful review, and taking time to read....:blush:

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    good np
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    Thanks again for taking time to read and enjoy the ku.

    Painted
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    Thank goodness Storytime pointed out to me that 'Hands' strum, and they don't 'strums', as I had before editing!!!

    Thank you so much for bringing that to my attention!!!!!

    Painted ;)

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    enchanting, mystical:sun: :welldone: :scores: :yay:

    write on,


    Posted By sage | Dec 11, 2006
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    Dear Sage,

    Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment. This is one of my favorites and I am thrilled that you enjoyed this. Your feed back helps me grow, and I am humbled. I will be revising as per your suggestions for my You've Got Mail, short story as well.

    PD :harp: ;) :huggles:

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    I thoroughly enjoy your work; you always amaze me at your acumen when it comes to spinning words...you go girl!:boast: :snog: :girllove: :yay:

    hugs,


    Posted By sage | Dec 11, 2006
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    Whooooooohooooooooooooo :harp:

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    G'day Painted. I'm not much of a expert with this style of verse you've sure painted a fine picture and I'm off for a glass of red.

    Bush Poet
    Merv Webster


    Posted By bush poet | Dec 12, 2006
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    Dear bush poet,

    Thank you for taking precious time to read and comment. I love ku's, and am glad you enjoyed this! Your comments put a smile on my face. Thank you again. Take Care.

    Painted ;)
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    wow... sometimes that's all there is to say & it's enough. truly enjoyed closely. unidos-

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    Yeah! Drink it down...wonderfully written...many thoughts and visuals for me. Great work you do PD...again and again.


    Posted By Benny | Dec 23, 2006
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    Awwww Thank you Ariono and Benny for taking time to read and comment. It keeps my poetic wings flying high.

    ~*Painted*~

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