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    Going Home

    My old bones feel so heavy,
    Sitting in my easy chair,
    This world is getting colder now,
    And no one seems to care.

    I’m reaching now, my final days,
    They’ve dwindled to a few,
    Each one much like the one before,
    And soon they will be through.

    At ten o’clock my son will come,
    To take me to a home,
    Where all I’ll do is eat and sleep,
    Bathe; brush my teeth and comb.

    I glance about my living room,
    Where I’ve sat, many years,
    The laughter of this room is gone,
    Now all that’s here are tears.

    All good times are, but memories,
    Now faded with the past,
    So soon I leave this all behind,
    Who knew it wouldn’t last?

    I gaze out of my window,
    To my garden ‘crossed the lawn,
    Next spring it will not matter,
    As all this will then be gone.

    Next week they’ll be an auction,
    They’ll sell all I once held dear,
    My son says it will be too hard,
    On me, if I am near,

    Three years now, I’ve been alone,
    That’s when I lost my wife,
    Since then, seems nothing matters,
    And I’m running out of life.

    Oh yes, I know, I’m very frail,
    And I forget my pills,
    There’s many things that I can’t do,
    And someone pays my bills.

    It’s just that I don’t want to go,
    My son says, “Dad, it’s best”,
    “For there, you’ll get the care you need,
    And your required rest.”

    I’ll get to share a twelve by twelve,
    With some old man like me,
    Who’ll be as sad and lonely,
    As a man alone can be.

    My things are packed, just one suitcase,
    Not much for eighty years,
    Now looking back, those years now spent,
    My eyes are filled with tears.

    Oh God, please call me home right now,
    I do not want to go,
    I want to be with my sweetheart,
    Because I love her so.

    I want to be with you dear Lord,
    Let Heaven be my place,
    I want to leave my world of gray,
    And gaze upon Your face.

    I packed some photos of my wife,
    Inside with my few clothes,
    A few mementos of our life,
    With meanings no one knows,

    One last stroll around the house,
    The bedroom, kitchen, den,
    I hear my son’s car in the drive,
    The clock is striking ten.


    Do you know anyone who has gone through
    this stage in life? Go... and visit with them.


    Posted By ronbliss | Jan 21, 2007
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    One can not feel the depth of this work you have written until they feel the depth of it firsthand...as I read this I could not help but breath a deep held sigh...brings a tear to my eye knowing how your old man felt in this poem. Indeed, wonderfully written and truthful to the point of pain.


    Posted By Benny | Jan 23, 2007
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    Benny,
    I guess that is why you and I and others write. In hopes that we can project emotion we feel into the hearts of someone else. Thank you for reading my poem and especially for taking the time to respond. When I wrote this piece I tried to be empathetic with what someone in this circumstance would experience. Again, Benny, thank you.
    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Jan 23, 2007
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    Ronbliss:

    This is a very moving poem, and I cannot find words to express how much it moved me.

    It almost brought tears to my eyes.

    Many thanks again for a wonderful and deeply human poem.:clapping:

    ronbliss JPiC Contributor

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    Nikos,

    Thank you for your very kind words. I truly appreciate it.

    Ron Bliss


    Posted By ronbliss | Feb 13, 2008
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    Hi Ron,

    A good friend's father is in such a situation so I can relate, through them, with what you have written. I think you have described the varied emotions very well and, though there are also some good times, the prospect of going to a nursing home must bring on a very lonely, morbid feeling. Great write, I shall be sharing this with my friend.

    Terence


    Posted By Terence | Feb 14, 2008
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    ronbliss JPiC Contributor

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    Terence,

    Thank you for reading my poem and for taking the time to comment. Your comments are greatly appreciated

    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Feb 14, 2008
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    that was searingly perfect. u get caught up in the story and the rhythmic choice was perfect.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Feb 14, 2008
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    ronbliss JPiC Contributor

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    Zaac,

    I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on the peom, "Going Home". Your words were very kind. Thank you.

    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Feb 15, 2008
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    OMG Ron.... do you know how hard this has hit me?? I am crying here..... because yes I know someone ... My Dad was just put in a home last fall by his wife..my aunt/stepmom... she could not care for him any longer. He is 73 almost 74 years old and has the fastest moving form of Senile Dementia that doctors here in Canada have ever seen. I miss my Dad so much. The vibrant, passionate, compassionate loving man that he was.... the gardener, the dreamer, the voice of reason, the tease, the stern one, the teacher... father, grandfather. This is a beautiful and accurate way to summarize my Dad's life. He is now just a shell of his former self and has become so childlike. No matter how much I love him .... it is soooooo hard to see him like what he has become. Although this one hurts me .... I am gonna favorite it.. Thank You Ron ..... *cries*..

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 16, 2008
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    Mysty,

    I am very sorry to hear about your father. 73 really isn't all that old and it is sad to see a viable, loving person be taken down by such a debilitation. I can sense your deep affection for him in your words. I am not certain what brought me to write that poem other than I like to write of the emotional realities of life. Regarding your father, there is always the bright hope for tomorrow when he will enjoy a new life in complete and utter joy for all eternity. I believe we all must suffer some in this life and your dear father has more than hlis share right now. God Bless you.

    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Feb 16, 2008
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    Thank You Ron... I must say ... whatever drove you to write this poem...... well hon it is dead on and despite the emotional draw this has on me .... I think it was beautifully written. I do think you have a marvelous talent Ron. To make folks feel anything just from reading a poem is really hard to do and honey you have done it in spades. Keep doing what you are doing. And yes I did favorite this to read over and over. Also gave you an excellent rating on this poem hon because it truly is excellent.

    *Hugs*

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 16, 2008
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    Mysty,

    Thank you for reading my poem, Going Home and taking the time to respond. I had answered you yesterday but something must have happened to it in cyberspace as I got another mailing today. So.... if you get two responses, don't think that I am senile. God holds a place on the other side for you father. An life that is imcomparable to this one. Rest assurred that in spite of the difficulty he goes through at this time, there are better times ahead. I am so glad you liked the poem. God Bless you.

    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Feb 17, 2008
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    ronbliss JPiC Contributor

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    Mysty,

    Man you are gonna think I am crazy. I see both of the replies are now there. When I clicked on the addy today it brought up yesterdays remarks you had made so I responded to that again. Now I see you sent two separate messages...... oh well.

    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Feb 17, 2008
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    I have no other comment but the fact that I cried...

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    this is a great poem. i thought it was from the actual person when i read it. it kind of steals the thunder from my initial interpretation to find out that it wasn't but, great in a different way that, it could make me think it was written from the actual person.
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    Hi Ron,

    Well, I have just got to read your most amazing poem.
    Its words strike me like a thunder. The message is so clear.
    It moves me so much. It brings me to tears...
    Your story reminds me of my dear aunts who went to a Nursing Home.
    They hated it!! My eldest aunt was 96 when she passed on.
    My younger one was 95. They died of old age, but they spent
    their last days in a Nursing Home away from their own home.
    It was devastating to me, Ron!!
    Thank you, Ron for sharing this touching story with the world!!
    Superb work of Art!!
    RON, MAY YOU LET ME USE THIS INSPIRATIONAL POEM TO POST IN MY POETRY BLOG
    FOR THE WORLD TO SEE, PLEASE?? I'LL SAY, POEM AUTHOR: RON BLISS.
    God bless you, Ron, and those you love!!
    Warm Regards,
    Starry.:girllove:


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