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    HIS PRISONER
    It was the I want you look
    That did me in
    That caused me to sin
    The I need you touch
    Of that man’s hand
    That stole every bit of
    My self control
    It was the warmth of his arms
    That surely did charm
    Me out of my clothes
    Those smooth slippery words
    Like the songs of pretty little birds
    That weakened me
    It was the kissing me from head to toe
    That caused me to go
    Temporarily insane
    It was the passion
    That made me a prisoner
    Of his lust
    It was a lockdown
    No way to escape
    I was captive
    Then captivated
    I succumbed
    To the cunning sly one
    I had no choice but to let go
    I was set free
    No longer a captive prisoner
    Now a willing co-conspirator
    We robbed each other of desires and lust
    It was sweaty exhausting hard labor
    Well worth the time
    With the con artist of mine
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Danette,

    :welcome: I am lovin, lovin, lovin this! Woooohhhooooo! This is crazy, sexy, cool, unique, smooth, vivid, so true for many, and so on. Wow, I envisioned on old black & white movie, the zuit suit, tipped hats, and the scarlett.... sly as a fox with her own game. Very unique, awesome flow, awesome story. I am looking forward to more of your work! Loved This! Thanks for sharing this with us.

    {{{~~~***KIMBERLY***~~~}}}} ;)
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Nice! For some reason I thought this was gonna be about rape - Pleasantly surprised to get to the gist of the "prisoner" shituation LOL --- Very smooth rhythmic flow going on here and a really nice melody of sorts - Liking the vybe, as surely as I know I too was a Prisoner :blush2:

    A very lovely write POETRY GARDEN - Thoroughly enjoyable - which means I like!
    Welcome to the Community and if you haven't done so thus far - feel free to introduce yourself via the Member Introductions section.

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 10, 2007
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    Poetry Garden New Member

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    Prisoner...

    Thanks Ladies,
    I think men and women have been there. I was a little nervous about posting my first poem here, but you two took that away...Thanks again!

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    Well hey there Danette, that's some mighty fine poetry you got there. I wouldn't mind meeting you when you get out of prison. Great job!


    Posted By Kit Carson | Jul 10, 2007
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    Thanks Mike...I escaped long ago...so we can meet anytime LOL

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    This was awsome..and soo..soo true. sometimes you just get caught up in the moment and u don't know what else to do besides go where the water takes you.. and sometimes. it's a mutual destination, others.. well. there are always forks in the road.. but it was definately an awsome poem ;)

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    great work! the only suggestion that i would make is about the transition from unwillful prisoner to free prisoner. i got the message at the very end but at the place where u talked about being set free, that was where it was slightly blurry about what was happening. that's just my opinion.
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    Danette this was AWESOME ... I like this soooo much more than your short shorts.. God the pics I saw..... the situation......it could be me. You did a Marvelous job ... Excellant write :D

    ~Mysty~


    Posted By Mysty | Jul 19, 2007
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