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    bloodletting_of_the_sky New Member

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    you, you had me by my soul
    by my life
    i had no pull... my freedom was torn
    because you told me how to live my life
    i couldnt learn... couldnt experience anything
    because had no strength
    to comfort me when i had fallen
    you tried to keep me away from all those mistakes
    but it still came... like a great big wad of humanity
    i fucked up
    and you with all of your insecurties
    couldnt bear to deal with me
    so you got in my face
    and you put me in my place
    down on the ground
    where the likes of you where
    still in misery like the rest of the world you lived in
    you wanted me to feel your pain
    well now i'm listening....
    but all i hear,
    is the constant echo of your fear
    dont get to close to anything that you hold dear
    not even your own son, God forbid
    just love him enough to kill all that lies ahead
    all the sorrows, all the rejection
    but the neglect wasnt the answer
    because now, without the love, and the lessons you should have taught me
    i am stuck in a place where i dont know where to go
    while you live at home
    with nothing to worry about
    but the past
    all the expectations that you failed in

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    Phillip,

    Always so very intense. I feel ya brother. I am curious who this is being written to.

    Jerry
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    Dear Phil,

    Yes, this is very intense and strong in form and words. You are expressing yourself here, and yes poetry has a way of healing or at least starting the process. The person who this is written for, did they read this? Nonetheless, your poetry is food for thought, and thought-provoking. Thank you Phil.....I will PM you also. Love ya!

    PD :)

    bloodletting_of_the_sky New Member

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    this is about the one person in my life that's had the strongets effect on me... my mother...
    there's to much to look back.. but the way i feel these days isnt close to whole....
    because i cant live my life without being constantly reminded of her... everything i do, every choice i make.. has been somehow dictated by the way i was raised... in fear and no commitment
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    Dear Phil,

    I was going to PM you and ask if this was for your Mother or Father...wow...

    PD

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    it sometimes feels like there will never be a conclusion i could come to about all the confusion i was raised on.... basically having no solid foundation but turmoil and depression to rely on... every fight for clearity and peace was slowly given up in a ironic somehow happy submission.. like it was perfectly normal to live in chaos and irresponsibility...

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