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    PoetryInMotion PoetryInMotion

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    "Holding On To My Heart"

    Somewhere in the valley of this distant mind of mine
    Echoes the joyous sound of a train whistle
    That has blown so many times
    ~
    This early morning cloud cover
    Filtering the trickling light
    Trying to burn its way through
    The windowpane
    My eyes see through
    ~
    Staring
    In a trance
    Mesmerized
    By the soft falling rain
    Flowing down
    It’s stained glass window
    Echoing a remembrance
    Not that far off
    Not that long ago
    ~
    Emotions flowing
    Gracefully out of her tear soaked eyes
    Holding her not knowing why
    ~
    She sleeps this night
    Under the soft moonlight
    ~
    Moonlit lines
    Outline the silhouette
    The contour of her beautiful form
    ~
    A whirlwind of emotions
    Settle in my mind
    Whilst
    My subconscious
    Purses her form
    ~
    Holding on to this heart of mine
    It’s homage to the emotions of her soul
    ~
    My sense of touch
    Encircles her heart
    Our souls
    Will find their home
    Amidst the open sea
    ~
    The unity
    Of our spirit filled souls
    Comfort each other’s misfortune
    ~
    Embraced by her love
    Tears of joy
    Her happiness
    The rush of falling in love
    The warmth of our courage
    Thinking of each other
    Wanting each other
    Our souls are illuminated
    ~
    This night’s moonlit sky
    Reflects a garden of red roses
    Sealing the love
    We have for each other

    © Arthur Henn

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    Arthur,
    I always enjoy reading your poems. I especially like the first stanza of this poem. What a wonderful image of a train going through a valley. It’s so peaceful and serene. I would love to see you continue the train theme through your entire poem. Buy a ticket, take it for a ride, tell your poem while looking out the train window, heck rob the thing if your want. It just seems like a fun idea to build on.
    It’s lovely as it is, but it came to mind, a “train of thought” might make a wonderful poem. For a quite awhile, I’ve wanted to take a train ride, maybe just a day trip, have lunch somewhere and return. I thought it might be a good way to do some writing.


    Posted By JolieH | Oct 4, 2007
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    PoetryInMotion PoetryInMotion

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    Jolie...you know what, I think you have just inspired and triggered a great train ride. I already have a great Idea. No telling where I'm going to go with it. Thank You! little lady and again thank you so much for you kind comments. I'm not deserving of them. I'm modest and I feel I have a long ways to go before I consider myself a good writer. But thank you. I will start that poem of a train ride for you.

    mysticpoet729 The "Mystic" Poet

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    i feel like you are stryggle with love and what your heart is telling you. nice rite
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    Dear Art,

    I love this as all your poems has such a magical feel to them. I too love the train theme in this piece and thanks for the ride. Last stop...LOVE....:)

    PD ;)

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