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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by mangodroplet, Jun 10, 2007.



    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    HOPE
    in wait
    unchanging

    A mother's cries sound
    but within her wailing
    comes belief that she will see

    "The trust, the faith, the thought of good."


    hehe.......the author of this style's first poem was also about hope!
    wah! just found out...haha. coolio :)
    The Clarity Pyramid Website - Poems

    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    HOPE CAPTURED!!!!!!!!!!!!! By ANNA alias mangodroplet

    First, for a first, this was brilliant! Not only did you follow, "to the tee" each aspect of the CP but you gave the word HOPE a life of its own with your spirit.

    If it is true you are only fifteen then you are going places! Don't ever stop writing.

    MY FAV:
    My CP HOPE is wanning in your presence!:faint:


    Jerry

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    WOW!
    I am in awe of Mr. I-created-the-clarity-pyramid!
    haha....thanks for the compliment!
    I try....:]
    :notworthy:

    Thank you ever so much, it means MUCHO MAS!
    You really really like it?
    AHH!
    i could die and be happy right now :D

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    Hi, Anna, as I previously remarked, you have talent and much potential. I think the crux of this form is the second triplet, and you have tied all the pieces together really well with yours.

    Terence


    Posted By Terence | Jun 10, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    wow....thanks for the insight Terence....
    I am very thankful for your reading and commenting...
    yes, i did think that the second triplet meant the most, and stories mean the most to me...so i figured i wanted a kinda story there.
    thank!

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    Mango Magnificent penning you have captured hope, and you have capture what hope really is trust faith and thoughts of good excellent
    hugs kisses
    Bear


    Posted By Bear | Jun 10, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    Thanks Bear!
    *huggles*
    :D
    I hate the word good, personally, but i couldn't find anything else that would work right there and get it right. :]

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    see sometimes the best of us comes out,
    our wishes desires, can easily be someone elses however,

    our poetic sight will always be reaching and in this case finding
    the best in us and everyone
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    Ms Mango,

    You captured the pure essence of the form and the message you wanted to convey in this piece. The second stanza is chilling, and it moved me so. Brilliant write Mango. Truly memorable, and beautifully executed. An excellent rating.

    Kim

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    Thanks Erik! Thanks PD!

    I try....to capture what i'm feeling in my heart.
    it gives me a certain exhilaration to capture what i want to say and fit it in a fixed form.
    i feel so accomplished and happy :]

    erik-what you say is so true...sometimes you need someone else to say it to know how to say it :]

    PD- Thanks soo much for commenting and reading :] I always love it when you comment! mucho love :wub: :]

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    great job for your first c.p....i am just learning this style...will post mine in a little bit...loved it and thanks for sharing.


    Posted By Checkmate | Jun 28, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    Thanks Checkmate.....I've been having a really bad day, but you cheered it a little. it means a lot.
    thanks.

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