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    I am the rain too old for lies

    and I’ve been wrenching pain

    and splendor

    from the clouds for ages.



    Listen to the eternal world

    of sound.



    Listen to the wonder notes

    dropping

    ladders

    from the

    clouds.



    Listen to the spider

    weeping.



    In the silence

    between

    every drop,



    many lives being born—

    all voices gather in me.



    A silent earth is listening.



    A silent earth

    bows her head

    to the ten-thousandth

    beating.





    CRA 9/24/2006


    Posted By ChrisA | Sep 30, 2006
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    Dear Chris,
    I simply love this piece. Painting powerful, thought provoking lines on such a small canvas is truly a talent. I loved the spacing which lended itself to thinking about each line. The layering in this was very nice as well. As a Scientist and Science teacher, I appreciated this greatly because nothing is as old as the Earth, Solar System, and Rain. Oh, what stories the Rain and Earth could tell, if each could speak. Bravo Poet.:wink2:

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    "dropping ladders from the clouds"

    This alone would make this poem worth so much to the reader - a bridge to a dream world - excellent poem

    Philip


    Posted By Mindings | Oct 1, 2006
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    gratitude for reader appreciation

    I want to thank you guys for the support and appreciation of the work that I do. It's hard to gauge whether a poem will have its intended effect without a reader other than myself. To hear the genuine appreciation from other poets is beyond what any writer can ask for. I am wonderfully encouraged by everyone on JPIC to keep doing what I'm doing. Thank you.


    Posted By ChrisA | Oct 1, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hi CHRIS - believe it or not - just had a bit of conversation with my brother about "big-ass spiders" lol

    Of course I'm kinda terrified of spiders - so my response was "Well - I don't do spiders..." But this poem makes me see something totally different about a spider's life....

    The picture you've painted of a spider weeping is almost heartbreaking. Just the mere thought of a spider's rainy day...

    I was kinda confused as to the meaning of your poem then I re-read it and such clarity takes shape in your words. The title "I am the rain too old for lies" There's such truth in that statement as to make it almost eternal and cliche - but the originality is resounding! In a fantastic way!

    I'd love to know your motivation for writing this piece!
    Very interesting read - Enjoyed this one - Thanx for sharing it!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 2, 2006
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    Dear Chris,

    I wanted to bring this back for all to enjoy, as it is truly lovely.

    {{{{{~~~***KIM***~~~}}}}}:)

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    glad Kim brought it back since I iddn't see it,
    what was so impressive was tha lay-out as well
    the verses were perfect and so nicely strewn
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    Thank you everyone. I wish I could write another one of those poems. Haven't written a poem in over three months . . .


    Posted By ChrisA | Jun 1, 2007
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    Aw - the dreaded writers block.
    CHRIS we do have a wonderful section on JPiC that may help you spark a bit of creativity. The Creativity Outlet has some wonderful writing exercises and challenges. Give it a try ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jun 1, 2007
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