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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by erikestabrook, Dec 23, 2007.



    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Everything starts with how I feel
    split apart in the dark to what you know
    ever seen the glossy surface of misery
    how it can be so revealing

    break apart to what I know
    its so easy to let go
    so much for how I feel
    too hurt to let love grow

    everything for you starts with I need you
    when need outweighs want
    you burrowed darkness and
    headed for my brain

    so if you want to slowdown
    I say speed up till we crash
    so much for how I feel
    you've shown you careless.

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    Erik:

    How raw and vivid you wrote about your emotions. The imagery was strong. It's how we all feel at times. Everyone one of us have had our heart broken, and have lived through the pains of disappointment and rejection. You're not alone.
    Thank you for sharing such a sureal and well structured poem. Here's hoping you have joy and happiness soon.

    Blessings

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Very insightful and brilliant imho.
    Much deeper meaning between the lines.
    You express it powerfully. Excellent write!


    Posted By Moonchild | Jan 17, 2008
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