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    He caught my scent
    cause i could pay the rent
    looked in my eyes
    and saw i was a prize
    to catch
    to snatch
    a respite from trash

    Talk
    was cheap
    and his words were deep
    enough to score
    while his hands explored
    i prayed
    he played
    a living tempo deep down

    Inside
    of me continually
    my eyes said go
    my body said no
    your lips were bitter
    with sugar coated
    kisses making my blood

    Flow
    like a river
    from kicks to licks
    tits to fists
    sitting in limbo
    waiting for my blow
    up in smoke went the us i knew
    when you found another me to screw

    I
    followed you inside her
    but heard the whisper
    of a falling dress
    and saw only madness
    I turned back the bed
    turned black to red
    lips bared in a smile

    all
    the while
    i carved 25 to life
    with a kitchen knife
    now i have a cell
    version of a living hell
    sharing with a bull
    more buttons to pull
    now heres the sitch
    I loved a bastard and became a bitch


    Posted By santui | Nov 10, 2006
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    Different, but speaks clear

    This piece is definitely different but speaks clear and kind of sad too. Keep up the poems Santui. Can't wait for the next. :)
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    Dear Santui,

    Wow!!! This got my attention from the title on down!! What a different flavor to add to our skittle rainbow of diversity. This was smooth, quick, had a rhyme, told a story, had emotion, and you poured this little masterpiece here on JPiC's canvas. I LOVED IT!!! I will be on the look out for more of your work, I like your style very much. Thank you for sharing this!

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    santui New Member

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    thank you i get great inspiration reading all the great stuff thats posted everyday so it's due in part to every word thats wriiten here


    Posted By santui | Nov 10, 2006
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    Nice with layers of feelings
    feeding new senses of an
    uneaten plate.

    Thanks for the read.


    Posted By Jeez | Nov 10, 2006
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