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    deep_poet86 Endless Rewind

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    Whoever thought we would
    say goodbye in a place like this
    No time to stand still
    Only the sighs in our hearts
    Everything is lost

    All homes burned to the ground
    I walk through the rubble to see if there
    is a face that is familier
    A lot of these people I don't know
    Some are asking for help
    Some are pleading
    It's in their eyes
    I keep on walking
    These people are not my problem

    Over the hill and past the creek
    is where my lady cries
    I find her under some boards and broken glass
    I tell her everything will be alright
    It will be over soon

    She is coughing up blood
    Where our unborn child was kept
    blood is slowly running from her side
    She has tears in her eyes
    "I don't want to leave you, I will lose you again."
    She reaches out for me
    I step back
    It's hard to look her in the eye
    Especially since I just came from another bed
    She knows

    "Do you love me...?" She has trouble breathing
    and speaking now
    It will be over soon
    "Love is a quiet gift, I only ever shared it with you."
    She cries harder now
    I turn around to face her once more

    Her beautiful golden hair is covered with blood
    her eyes once green are swollen
    It doesn't even look like her
    I won't cry over this one
    I had many women
    I will find another one after she goes off

    When I seen her eyes close
    it came over me anyways
    The tears I didn't want to show
    to the world or to her
    It seems to be so hard to let her go
    It is so hard to understand
    My heart is turning into cold stone
    Maybe I will never love again

    By: Lee-Ann Wolsey
    12/21/2006
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    such a sad write Deep Poet it is beautifully written. The image is one of great sadness and despair of losing a true love
    bear


    Posted By Bear | May 28, 2007
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    Bear JPiC Contributor

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    this is a very sad write Deep Poet. The Image of heartache and despair as one loses a true Love
    hhugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | May 28, 2007
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    deep_poet86 Endless Rewind

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    Thank you Bear, yeah it is a sad one

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    Yeah, this is a sad poem deep86. But I love how this story unfolds! Nicely done!:notworthy:

    deep_poet86 Endless Rewind

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    Thanks Curtis Spider Lee :)


    Posted By deep_poet86 | Aug 7, 2007
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    hmm when I think this I think well its a tragedy no wits up to you to specify the specific tragedy and if you do that the poem would be even more gripping

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    I thank you for reading this, you are right. I didn't even bother to let my readers know what happened to cause the tradgedy, perhaps if I have a strike of creativity I can make some changes :) Again thanks for the comment

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