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    lanaia74 New Member

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    I know within my heart, even thought, you are no longer here
    Your energy, will remain forever by my side
    Some people choose to believe you are forever gone, but to me this fact remains to me very clear
    Soul mates we are and I will forever remain, your bride

    When we took our vows so long ago, we meant them to be forever and a day
    Some would choose to think, for grief's sake, within my mind, this I fantasize
    But deep within my soul, I know the truth, and from this I will never sway
    We lived a good life on this earth, as to your death, I have no whys

    A love that was as deep as ours, only those that have shared the same thing, would understand
    A pact made between lovers, soul mates, that our love will never die
    A love so strong that is transcends life and death, time and space, as infinite as my wedding band
    So I only mourn the time, I will not see you for a while, this is why I cry

    But I can't tell others this, I would only gain their pity and sympathy
    Them thinking, I am so grief stricken, I am imagining things
    So, I silently smile to myself, knowing you by my side, this will always be
    If the world would understand, this message to the world, I would happily sing

    But no, the secret I possess, will forever remain within my soul
    Knowing you will always be with me in my dreams
    Your death, just taking you to a different place, waiting this will be my only toll
    But until that day, you will always be beside me, always and forever, if only in my dreams


    Posted By lanaia74 | Mar 21, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    There is a lovely and "deep abiding love "concept in this piece. Isn't it just so peaceful and fabulously satisfying to feel those with us who have passed on?

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hi LANAIA - this poem is quite beautiful actually - the concept. The writing is stated eloquently, softly, matter-of-factly! I like it.

    I was actually browsing my personal website a little earlier - I have a dedication to my favorite Auntie who passed back in 2005 from her battle with breast cancer. Wow! I thought to myself WOW! Has it really been that long...

    But anyway - not to dwell on that. But the concept of having a loved-one with you throughout eternity.... That seems just beautiful to me.

    Then your poem takes on a more intimate quality:

    And I just had to smile (ever inwardly) to myself - I know this feeling well.
    Nice writing!

    Thanx for the share.

    ALSO - If I may endeavor to be silly for a moment...
    WHY ON EARTH do you not have an avatar yet??? We have several avatars in our galary that you may like. After over 200 posts - I say - Give yourself an AVATAR Girl ;) ----> http://jpicforum.info/profile.php?do=editavatar

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 22, 2007
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