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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by ¤Me¤, Oct 22, 2006.



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    Im not a queen from the 1800's,
    nor am i wealthy,
    nor am i here with you,
    but the truth is,
    i care.

    Im no princess from the past years,
    nor am i happy,
    nor am i near,
    but your tears to see,
    i wouldnt bear.

    Im no fortune teller,
    nor am i the future,
    nor am i with superpowers,
    but all i know,
    is that for me you shed a tear.

    Im not perfect,
    nor am i a disaster,
    nor do i live in extremes,
    but all i know is,
    you're in my dreams..


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Oct 22, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey ME - sounds interesting. The very last two lines:
    but all i know is,
    you're in my dreams..


    Those lines speak volumes to me, as I know some people who don't sleep. Sounds disasterously drastic, but such is the ravaging that are perpetrated upon their bodies, their souls are eternally tired...

    I'm sure they'd love to have a dream, but only can sympathize with the beginning lines of your poem.

    The last lines make all the difference to me. Dreams are sacred, and if they aren't, they damn well should be!

    I enjoyed this one - Thanx for sharing it with us!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Nov 11, 2006
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    Patricia_Lynn Patricia_lynn

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    Hello Me

    I read your poem Me, and for as young as you are, I would say you've done an excellent job. And I feel as MSJac, I myself have problems sleeping, like right now, lol. Great job hun :) Keep up the good work

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    haha and again...this is interesting :]

    I liked it...
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    very nice Me!! I like these lines:

    I'm not perfect,
    nor am i a disaster,



    you talk of all the things you're NOT! is there one about the things you are?

    are you planning to post your short story?

    Nomad

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