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    Sealiah Poetic Dancer

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    In darkness lays the path to shame
    The way to hell and back...
    In darkness rests my feet and blade
    My shining eyes in black.

    And there you sit with innocence
    Your hands move through your hair
    A hum that leaves that pretty throat
    With flesh that draws my stare.

    I clutch my blade that's always true
    To the heart it always flies.
    I step behind you and raise the edge..
    But faltering now I sigh.

    Only you could reach my heart
    With that soft and glistening eye
    Only you could speak to me
    And never breathe a lie.

    You reached out into the dark
    And there you caught my hands
    Drawing me into the light
    Into your peaceful lands.

    The blade shakes now in my palms
    I know what I should do
    But yet I cannot draw the edge
    against the flesh of you...

    It twitches as the Darkness calls
    And while I watch with pain
    The blade falls straight into your heart
    As blood drips down the lanes...

    In these two hands you're dying
    In these two hands you bleed
    With these two hands I bury thee
    and Kill my tears with glee.

    And though I think upon your face
    And though I miss your joy,
    In darkness is my fate and place
    In Pain I laugh, rejoice.


    Posted By Sealiah | Oct 26, 2007
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    KingAce JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Very interesting piece. it has a lot of pain that you can feel throughout the poem. I really do love it when a poet's emotions can not only be seen but felt in the poem. this one of those poems where that happens. It is easy to follow along with yet complicated in what to exactly explain the emotions as. It was a joy reading this, I haven't read any poems (including my own) in a long time and it feels like home coming back to read something as deep as what you have displayed here...much more than poetry this here is a cycle of thoughts. Thanks for the read;


    Posted By KingAce | Oct 26, 2007
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    Hey now Sealiah,

    This is a really good read. I like the theme and content.. This drew me in from the start and held me to the end... Nice flow, I liked mucho.......


    Posted By lasher | Oct 26, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    very cool poem Sealiah,

    the conflicting emotions led to a decision that was very tainted,
    but for poetic value it was the right choice as it brought the poem up a few notches

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    Maybe it's your avatar, but this poem reminds me of an anime or manga ... no particular one, I guess ... anyway, I love the passion and melodrama it evokes. :) ... thank-you for sharing.
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    Sealiah Poetic Dancer

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    Thanks guys! This poem is actually rather unique for me. The 'narrator' if you will, is Death himself. When he actually kills the girl, it isn't entirely him doing it. He is Death, and he doesn't really have a choice. So when it happens anyways, he is relieved, because the burden of taking lives isn't really his, as it is something that would happen anyways.

    LOL. That is what happens when you work 12 hour shifts from 7pm to 7am.


    Posted By Sealiah | Oct 26, 2007
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    mysticpoet729 The "Mystic" Poet

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    i like the emotion in the poem. but when i read it, i didn't death. i see someone going through pain in life but still laugh and say you are not getting the best of me. lol

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